Some believe that one should spend more time being far away from the people we care about, because it is necessary for people to understand the importance of relationship of people we care about, while others think being away from people we care about can damage our relationships with them. Which one do you agree with? Why?
There is no doubt that everyone in his daily life gets familiar with different individuals who leave profound effects on him and maybe make friends with some of them. The simple recognition of the argument lends our discussion to the questions of how two close friends can cement their relationship. Although some people adhere to this belief that they should be far away from each other to perceive the value of the relationship, I believe it poses a threat to their friendship, since it weakens their emotion bond and also they cannot help each other.
The first aspect to point out is that what damages friends’ relationship those are far from each other is weakening their emotional relationship. In fact, at the turn of the new century, with the development of human modern society, there are a lot of weights of obsession on people’s minds; so if friends are far from each other, they do not have enough time to interact with each other, express their emotion and fortify their relationship. To illustrate more, take a case of two friends who are making friends for several years for instance. If they live near each other, they can go the gym and play computer games every day. Not only can they have endless hours of sheer fun, but also they enjoy from being with each other. Hence, a person can strengthen his relationship with friends who are near him.
A furthermore subtle point is that what provokes close friends not living far away from each other is helping each other in catastrophic circumstance. Indeed, human life is analogous to a tortuous way in a mountain in quite a few aspects. It is axiomatic that everyone in his life runs into huge problems and he needs supports of his close friends. Should his close friends live in the vicinity of him, he can cope the problems by the assistance of them. Also, they can psychologically boost his morale and instill precious concepts such as perseverance and diligence to tackle the problems. In this way, he can appreciate the value of his friends who make him more energetic and lively by their presence. In contrast, if his friends do not have physical presence beside him, he will feel lonely. Therefor, their relationship little by little is damaged.
On the whole, according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is crystal-clear (obvious) that far distance between two friends can damage their relationship since they cannot express their emotion, and support each other. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that close friends who just communicate through telephone or the internet can sustain their relationship. It is anticipated that friends without face to face communication readily forget each other.
- integrated 46 73
- integrated 44 60
- integrated 47 60
- Do you agree to plan a course for university students: "Speaking in front of public" 70
- Taking a lot of time to make an important decision is often considered as a bad quality for a person However some people think that is a good quality for a person 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mmunication readily forget each other.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'for instance', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'on the whole']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20315581854 0.229887763892 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.143984220907 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0927021696252 0.0866891130778 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0591715976331 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.094674556213 0.0685040099705 138% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.126232741617 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0197238658777 0.0351676179071 56% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75834654908 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0216962524655 0.0309702414327 70% => OK
Particles: 0.00197238658777 0.00188951952338 104% => OK
Determiners: 0.0887573964497 0.0887237588012 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0276134122288 0.0209618222197 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0157790927022 0.0139019557991 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2709.0 2387.08602151 113% => OK
No of words: 456.0 408.028673835 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94078947368 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.326754385965 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247807017544 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166666666667 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103070175439 0.112833075102 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75834654908 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504385964912 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 57.7765927055 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.8 20.5533526081 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.816342376 48.84282405 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.45 120.699889404 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.5533526081 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.85 0.644075263715 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 47.5807017544 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.17218543046 1.45489161554 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247318031297 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12611373316 0.103427244359 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.080097850306 0.0752933317313 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.485035149053 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146488116525 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912270494244 0.114077575197 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587551289914 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.397490684966 0.336927656856 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0707050208016 0.067059652881 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182657037115 0.210909579961 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420760884223 0.0618886996521 68% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.