Some believe that one should spend more time being far away from the people we care about, because it is necessary for people to understand the importance of relationship of people we care about, while others think being away from people we care about can damage our relationships with them. Which one do you agree with? Why?
Throughout the history, civilizations have been founded based on human relationships. While these communications have undergone massive changes over time, they are accounted as of the utmost important to each community. The attitude toward this term is varied so that a plethora of people is in the conviction that they should keep their distance from their dears to remind them the importance of their relationships. Contrary to this popular belief, there are those who argue that keeping distance may threaten to undermine the relations. I am of the opinion that people should do their best in order to preserve their friendships.
First of all, rapid changes and complexity of today's world present new challenges and put new demands on the people. Admittedly, the growing segment of people become more involved in their routine activities every day, and they do not have time to spend with their friends. Nowadays, the more people get engaged in their life, the less they pay attention to their relations, and it becomes the matter of concerns for many sociologists that people become less and less in contact with each other. Subsequently, people are already far apart from each other, and keeping this distance deliberately, will not be a sensible choice. Furthermore, technology is another implication of modern societies that restrict human relationship; so it seems that being far away in order to urge others to appreciate the relations, not only do not solve the main problem but also worsen the situation. Imagine a circumstance that a person has decided to step back, while his friend is not aware of his purpose. As a result, the other side keeps the right to break the relation or less in touch. That is why the intentional consequences are often inevitable.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that people establish various kinds of relationships with each other, and most of them are not comparative. In fact, it is the acceptable principle in human science that says: "The human is unpredictable." This statement approves that there is not a particular rule for the relationships; therefore we cannot generalize that being far away from other make them to value their relationships. Moreover, friendship is for hard times. If it is supposed that friends abandon each other due to different reasons, this word loses its meaning. Undoubtedly, each tie has two sides which have the mutual connection with each other, and it should be balanced. Although, if someone thinks that she has imposed most of the load of the relation, they can clear the issue instead of going away and leaving her friend with the hope that he feels regret and retrieves their relationship.
On the basis of the points mentioned above, I am convinced that social communication plays a crucial role in this era of time, so people should try to spend enough time with others. Besides, people can manage their distance according to their relationships with other and keeping distance to change their mind is not a wise option.
- TPO 4 Integrated 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, apart from, in fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2563.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09542743539 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.898057419 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528827037773 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4683844734 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.047619048 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9523809524 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240231549794 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667118321562 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522495860429 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153599327738 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035108280743 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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