Some children prefer to socialize (get together and have fun) after school with very little involvement from parents or teachers, for example, they enjoy games or activities that they can organize and play safely without help from adults; Other children prefer to socialize after school by joining groups or participating in programs organized and monitored by adults. Which way of socializing after school do you think is most helpful for children development? Why?
After a long day studying at school, young kids frequently have some free time to attend various activities that can enrich their life. Whether parents should be involved in those programs has been brought to the attention of the public. Relevant authorities are urged that parents should monitor and organize activities that their children join. From a personal point of view, I think that without attendance from adults, youngsters could obtain more development.
Firstly, enjoying games beyond parental supervision can cultivate children’s independence. Some people may argue that if adults could monitor everything that happened to their kids, there would be no safety problems occurring. However, parental involvement is not conducive to the development of youngsters’ independent personality. Because when the youth can organize activities solitary and figure out all the difficulties that they encounter within the games by themselves, they could grow more quickly and gain achievements. For example, according to a survey, adolescents who join programs without participation from family members are more likely to foster essential abilities which play an important role in their future, like organization or problem solving abilities.
In addition, without the involvement of outsiders, teenagers could develop deeper friendships. Since the youth could play together and talk about their studies, hobbies and even saddest things with each other. As a result, they may find the most appropriate fellows during this time. But if parents show up at the event, there would be another consequent since not all teenagers could tell others the essential parts when their mother or daddy is around. For instance, I have several really good friends. I have known them since I was a little kid and we often did homework at that time. Without the presence of parents, we shared our secrets with others and did a lot of meaningful things. After so many years, I still keep in touch with them and never forget those memorable days. Therefore, leaving young offspring alone is good for cultivating their friendship.
Finally, if parents need to organize each activity and monitor every action of their kids, they would be very tired. Besides, not both parents have so much free time on these programs since they not only have a number of work to do but also need to take care of other family members.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, I hold the view that parents should not be involved in their children’s activities, just give the youth more free time and also free them up.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... activities that can enrich their life. Whether parents should be involved in those pro...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20813397129 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69505544856 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586124401914 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3512665339 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300078872659 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815296359776 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403449968324 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164021186958 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472622245606 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... activities that can enrich their life. Whether parents should be involved in those pro...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20813397129 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69505544856 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586124401914 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3512665339 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300078872659 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815296359776 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403449968324 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164021186958 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472622245606 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... activities that can enrich their life. Whether parents should be involved in those pro...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20813397129 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69505544856 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586124401914 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3512665339 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300078872659 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815296359776 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403449968324 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164021186958 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472622245606 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.