Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
It is indisputable that the parents play a pivotal rule for training and guidance their children in the life. They provide a lot of equipment for children which are very important for their future. However, should the parents spend money as a prize to increase the children's grides? From my perspective, I strongly disagree with this work. Because of two reasons that involved loss of the learning worth and making lazy children. I support them by details and example as the following.
As I mentioned in the first paragraph, loss of the learning worth is one of the results of spending money for a higher grade. Children need to understand success in exam how much is important. They need to know money hasn't real worth in this world. This point of view is the most important in my points of view. For supporting this claim, I've stated my experience as an example. When I was in high school, my mother promised me that she will spend 10 dollars if I get a high score. I got a good score and got a good prize. But after that exam, my mother didn't spend any money. After that, I didn't like to read for the exam while that was a big mistake because my GPA reduced in that term. It was a horrible experience.
Moreover, a primary purpose for any person is to access the success in the future. This aim needs a clear aim or dream. When the parents promise their children that they will give money because of a good score, they actually destroy their aims and dreams. The children think money is the real aim that they can achieve that soon by parents while in the real world we need many time and much patient to give our aims from the world.
Having considered all the discussion above, money for higher grade is a worse idea. Some of parents are not aware of horrible results of this work. They can easily destroy their children live.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5119047619 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31135635445 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502976190476 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6155772053 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.9130434783 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6086956522 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.34782608696 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346269003039 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864664667595 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595344358407 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21385033211 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309412537066 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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