TPO 01 - Independent - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and ex

The students spent a lot of time at the college, Probably they say between 4-6 years or even more at the same college which mean the same building, cafeteria, classes, library, and the list goes on. So in order to make the student more alert and more relaxed, I believe that all the university departments should receive the same fund regardless if it's for education or for entertainment.
First and foremost, sports has a crucial impact on life. Needless to say, the students and the teachers are so busy of working, studying and even taking care of their family, so they require a place to make them vent and getting rid of all the negative vibes for life. If there is no place to help them, the daily life will be so hard. However, there some people would not go every day, but still, they need someplace to help them relax. apparently, the sport and social activity should receive the same attention to enhance the student relaxation.
Secondly, the exercise in general, enhance the brain alertness. Which in turn, help students to be healthy, doing well in their studying and even with their life. No doubt that sport contributed significantly with health, thinking, problem-solving and also increase the concentration for understanding different subjects. If the students do not practice their brain in a proper way, this would lead to decrease their progress, also can cause delay to get their credits. whereas, some people prefer to fund the classes and library more than the fun centers; which is not wrong but simultaneously, the joyful centers also require to focus on.
Due to the aforementioned, I'm firmly believed that the sports and social societies should get the same amount of money as well as the classes and libraries which lead to increase the alertness and concentration for both students and teachers.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, whereas, in general, no doubt, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91585760518 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71200500481 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550161812298 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9904214469 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.846153846 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111723193446 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435613888547 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461528256117 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732235803588 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176066667912 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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