TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

This question has arisen much controversy among psychologists and people. Some of them are subscribed to this idea that children benefit from technology. On the other hand, others are of the belief that it leads to less creativity. I personally go along with the idea that it is disadvantageous for them. Several reasons go as follows.

To put my firs reason forward, I should say it brings about less thinking. Since it gives to them the prepared staff without thinking more. If you use something that makes ready everything, you will not be able to think either how it works or why this works in this way. For instance, imagine in school, if children use their tablet or something like that in order to solve their mathematics questions, they will be less likely to understand the question profoundly. Owing to the fact that, their tool will provide them with lots of probable solutions, they just try to sole it based on this manners and they are less willing to use their potential to create their own solution.

Another reason we must not ignore is that it leads to a growing decrease in advancement in science. Since children play a vital role in society's development, their ability should be fostered from an early age. However, the technology make easy everything for them, that causes they have easy and instant access for everything, it will be a threat for society to be deprived from the efficiency of this generation. On this account, if the past generation of children used this technology like todays, we would not be able to have this devices as now we have.

The last but not the least, it causes that the useful golden time of children be replaced with useless hobby. Because it attracts their attention to itself. While your kid uses this he will be overwhelmed by it and he may play with such things many hours. In fact, instead of playing with his friends and enjoying of this useful social activity, he devotes his time to this tool. Since play with friends provides them with meaningful thinking and rises competition that has a positive effects on their problem solving and a vast number of issues that will make children creative.

To put my reasons in a nutshell, since children have a decisive factor in development of a society, we should pay attention enough to what boosts their creativity and what suppresses. Thus, we should discourage them to use less technology which has the mentioned features. It suffices to say that it decreases thinking, advancement and play.

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.200421940928 0.229887763892 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.164556962025 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.07805907173 0.0866891130778 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.035864978903 0.046263068375 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.107594936709 0.0685040099705 157% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.128691983122 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0295358649789 0.0351676179071 84% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62673499968 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.042194092827 0.0309702414327 136% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0801687763713 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0274261603376 0.0209618222197 131% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0189873417722 0.0139019557991 137% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2522.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 431.0 408.028673835 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85150812065 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.317865429234 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.243619489559 0.251872472559 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176334106729 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106728538283 0.112833075102 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62673499968 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517401392111 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 58.8249763943 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5909090909 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7984824788 48.84282405 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.636363636 120.699889404 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5909090909 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.454545454545 0.644075263715 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 43.9528580468 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.16438356164 1.45489161554 80% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250797408174 0.300154397459 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104278862356 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0705439338091 0.0752933317313 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.474139396171 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137863645631 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918979468163 0.114077575197 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453258584783 0.0781384742642 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301690121175 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0463385500433 0.067059652881 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171696021584 0.210909579961 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252376272625 0.0618886996521 41% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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