Technology is considered one of the most important aspects in our life. We are living in the most dynamic world and this is because of technology. Each one of us is caring about the technology and how to be up to date to cope with the community. I am sure that some people will agree that technology has made children more creative. While, others might disagree. However, when it comes to me I believe that technology has very good impact on our children for two important reasons. I will demonstrate my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, technology helps our children to improve their skills. Nowadays, children are caring about technology. They are willing to learn any new skills or talent. Also, children has the ability to learn very fast when they are young. For example, I have a little daughter she is five years old. My husband gave her a tablet in her fifth birthday. You cannot how much she is happy by her tablet. She used to use her tablet like two or three hours a day. This tablet helped her to learn how to do math, how to learn the letters and she learned all the colors. This is because she watched many educational programs through her device. In addition, she used her tablet to create photos and she colored these pictures by herself. This experience taught me that when you give your child to use and interact with the technology that will reflect positively on their skills.
In addition, technology helps our children to gain much information than before. Nowadays, the educational system changed completely at school. Teacher at elementary school and high school used to provide children with modern system for education. For instance, my cousin is ten years old. He is living at Italy. When he back to our home county he told me that he used to use the computer at his home work. Besides, he is working on his mid term paper on the computer. He states that using the computer gave him a good chance to learn much information in different fields like math, biology, physics and music. Furthermore, using the internet through the computer was the secret behind improving his computer skill. This is because he used to meet his friends and work together as a group in all papers work. So, he became more educated, more talented, and skillful person. In addition, he will be able to study the materials of two semesters in just one semester because he has enough information at many subjects. As you can see, technology helps students to gain much information and make them more creative.
In sum, I believe that technology is very important for all children. This is because technology helps children to improve their skills and because technology provides children with much information. As a result, children became more talented and more creative than before. I advise all parents and teachers encourage students to use the modern technology.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nology has made children more creative. While, others might disagree. However, when i...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s ten years old. He is living at Italy. When he back to our home county he told me t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80761523046 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57152259623 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458917835671 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7972573102 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.6388888889 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8611111111 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27777777778 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161104234964 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421483571256 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039889530897 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111875020521 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309173687887 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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