TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task
Humans can lead their life only one time, so it is understandable that they want to be successful. The way how to be a successful person is being discussed, but in my opinion, I agree with the statement that we should try something new and take risks in order to be successful for the following reasons.
To begin with, trying new things is a good way to broaden one's horizons. We are more likely to get opportunities with wider views. For example, when my father was a university student, he majored civil engineering. One day, the competition to make a new plan for the route of the school bus was held and he attended it. In order to think about a new plan, he read a lot of books on economics, which was challenging for him because that was his first time studying economics. Thanks to this experience, after graduation, he succeeded in making new service and it was used by many people.
Moreover, we are likely to gain much money by trying something new that nobody has tried. If there are no competitors, the cost for service can be determined without constraints. Let me introduce an example to follow this point. In a history class I took at my high school, my teacher taught the history of Toshio Sato, who was the first person in Japan to sell umbrellas. His umbrellas were very useful and because no one sold ones then, he can sell them at high cost. As a result, he gained a lot of profits. This example clearly illustrates the importance to try new things.
As I stated above, trying new things enables us to expand our scope and earn money. Therefore, I strongly stand by my point that trying new things is a good way to be successful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ing new things is a good way to broaden ones horizons. We are more likely to get opp...
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Line 5, column 429, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ere very useful and because no one sold ones then, he can sell them at high cost. As...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1360.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50331125828 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65383665621 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582781456954 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3528092849 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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