TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on university.
Nowadays, it has become a heated debate on whether governments should spend more money on the education of the young generation or not. Some people hold the opinion that there are other more important parts in society than young children’s educations in a way that those should effectively be considered; however, others have different attitudes. As far as I am concerned, young children play a significant role in the progress of every country. The more money spends on the education of this generation, the more development a country will have. In the following, I will elaborate more on this issue.
First, although universities are one of the important parts of every society, the children of today are the leaders of tomorrow. If a government wants to allocate certain money to increasing the scientific level or even improving the scientific growth rate of universities, undoubtedly, it will require a significant amount of money. On the other hand, the government can likely spend less time and money to invest in children’s educations, and the positive effects of this investment will bring up soon. For example, in recent years, Parliament has passed a new law that allocated a significant budget to the younger generation. The passage of this law was originated from extensive research into the government's financial saving processes. According to this research, governments can reduce their financial costs, especially in universities and schools, in the coming years by investing in the new generation.
Second, the new generation is both more creative and flexible as well as teachable than the older generation. Since they learn and accept a wide variety of concepts and materials in a short time, spending a certain amount of energy and money on the younger generation will have extensive positive results in the future. Lessons given to children can establish a new definition of proper social relations, being law-abiding, and even the appropriate concept of being human in children’s minds in their future.
In conclusion, regarding the points mentioned above, not only will spending more money on children’s educational progress lead to huge advancements in the future of every country, but also governments can achieve many long-term goals in society, through this investment. They can provide significant benefits, and that government funds invested early in children’s educational progress may ultimately lead to a reduction in future costs.
- TPO 45 TASK 2 WRITING Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reas 73
- TPO 48 TASK 1 WRITING 70
- Tpo 40 task 1 writing 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to 76
- TPO 44 TASK 2 WRITING Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as teachable 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...ative and flexible as well as teachable than the older generation. Since they learn ...
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Line 4, column 69, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...e points mentioned above, not only will spending more money on children’s educational pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37275064267 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05256040815 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529562982005 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0323615415 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.625 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270802806811 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927278207447 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673607811896 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164207734351 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657103712054 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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