TPO 40: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In fact, selection of the ways of encouraging has turned into a controversial issue during recent years which has obliged many policymakers to recruit researchers in order to test the suggested methods to detect the effectiveness of encouraging method specially or children who are going to school. Although some people, if were asked, would agree with the mentioned statement that parents should offer money to their kids because of their appropriate mark, others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as my memory helps, I am in agreement with the latter group. Because not only can students be encouraged to study better but they also learn the famous fact that the more the hardworking the more achievements gained; moreover, parents can share their happiness by appreciating their child; Although, the parents should be aware of the advantages and disadvantages of their manners.
Actually, as mentioned above, paying money is counted as an easy way that is chosen by parents to acclaiming kids who have participated properly in school and have obtained high marks. children like adult expect to be paid attention by others when they do their best; therefore, paying money as a gift can extremely contribute them to educate the lesson more appropriately the next years; in fact, the money will be turned into a motivation for students to improve positively.
Indeed, it is hard to ignore the fact that some significant lessons can be taught to children by doing them in ordinary positions. "The results directly rely on the amount of effort of people" this statement would be shown to kids by offering money when they have done a worthwhile endeavor such as a success in school. Hence, considering my notion, not only can it cause children to be happy at the moment but they also will take advantages in the long-term.
One cannot neglect the fact that all approaches have pros and cons. sometimes encouraging children not only doesn't help the student to be progressed but also it; quite the opposite, gets away them from their lessons. For instance, my cousin has bought a computer game by the gift; hence, he completely has forgotten the schools’ home works.
All in all, I myself; according to my experiments, absolutely agree with the idea. Because I have seen my exponential advancement which has been achieved by my parents acclaimed from when I was an infant to nowadays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s and disadvantages of their manners. Actually, as mentioned above, paying mon...
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...n for students to improve positively. Indeed, it is hard to ignore the fact th...
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...ill take advantages in the long-term. One cannot neglect the fact that all app...
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...rgotten the schools' home works. All in all, I myself; according to my ex...
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...iments, absolutely agree with the idea. Because I have seen my exponential advancement ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as for, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06965174129 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81695303043 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559701492537 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.9847554312 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.571428571 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7142857143 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197765627635 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637826010921 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424153462386 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107742309392 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442344194469 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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