TPO 41
Something lost its value and others gain value in time. This case exist for teacher. The teachers who lived in past are fairly different than today's teachers. This change is not good because theachers lost their importance in time. I will explain two arguments why teacher were more appreciated in the past.
Firstly, in the past, teachers were the most important information reasourse but with technological change their importance declined. For example, My father told me that in their time they only had teachers for learning something. One day, my father waited his teacher two hours for only one quetion. It is quite odd according to today's students. However, nowadays, it is not this way. Students have lots of reasource such as websites, e-book, cheaper academic textbook and they do not require to their teachers and so teachers lost their status and people do not appreciate teachers as in the past.
Secondly the fact that, teachers who live in nowadays is not sufficient enough on their subject. They do not spend time so much for their job. Instead of that they spend so much time their private life especially social media but teachers who are in the past were idealist person and had a goal. And also,they wanted to improve their society's education level. For example, My literature teacher whose age is 65 said to me that at their time, he and his friends worked hours and hours and never broke out because he told that they have an ideal and they spent whole time to obtain it. But, nowadays , especially in my country that type of teacher almost is not exist and teachers spend a lot of time with out of subject.
To sum up, technological changes affected number of things and teachers are one of them. They were appreciated and valued by society but now they lost those due to technological efect and their own lack of ideals. In my opinion, If teachers want to gain their old importance they can achieve that even if there are lots of resources.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... who lived in past are fairly different than todays teachers. This change is not goo...
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Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...condly the fact that, teachers who live in nowadays is not sufficient enough on their subje...
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Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...idealist person and had a goal. And also,they wanted to improve their societys educat...
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Line 5, column 598, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t whole time to obtain it. But, nowadays , especially in my country that type of t...
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Line 5, column 661, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...ntry that type of teacher almost is not exist and teachers spend a lot of time with o...
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Line 5, column 700, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
... exist and teachers spend a lot of time with out of subject. To sum up, technological...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77485380117 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45847803979 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520467836257 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6458925273 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.65 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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