TPO 45- independent writing task do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
The issue of whether today, young people are able to make the decision by their own comparison with the past aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people, if were asked would agree with the statement that in the past, young people were more depend on their parents to make their important decision in comparison today, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I postulate nowadays, youngsters are more capable to make a decision without depending on their parents. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that in today’s world, young people are taught the decision making not only by their parents but also by their teacher at school from an early age. Parents attempt to prepare their children for real life, as they know the process of being independent take a long time. They teach many useful and necessary skills to their children, and one of these skills is making a wise decision in any situation, as they realize they could not support them for entire life. Moreover, the government has their own schemes to develop the personality of each member of society to be an efficient person in the future. They most invest in the educational system to train them significant skills by professional tutors. For instance, I usually get my daughter an opportunity to select her personal interests by herself although she is a little kid. In the kinder garden, their teacher gives them some tasks to do independently to make a decision on their own. And all of this assist them to be a wiser person in the future.
Another reason that deserves some words is that young people can readily exploit other’s experiences without any difficulties which help them to make a decision individually. New technology in the form of the Internet gets them a chance to have access the people’s outlook and experiences in various subjects and drive benefits. To illustrate this point let’s consider the following example. When I wanted to choose my major at university, I read many websites to gain information about my favorite major and its job condition in the future. In addition, I read the people judgment who majored this field and all of these really valuable for me to choose my current major. While, the absence of technology pushed young people to depend on their parents to select logical choices, as they had more experiences.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments that explored above, I am of the opinion, nowadays, young people can make a decision independently, as they are prepared from an early age to make a reasonable decision. moreover, they can utilize the Internet and achieve more knowledge about their decision which is really helpful for them.
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- TPO2 Q1Integrated TOEFL Writing 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...arly age to make a reasonable decision. moreover, they can utilize the Internet and achi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, really, so, while, for instance, in addition, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93608247423 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74788665547 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501030927835 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2060940131 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.7 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453068289641 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13302125494 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110783147338 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285148445916 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921722431008 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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