TPO 45- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives
There has been much discuss around family and their relationship and dependence to their parents. one group of people believe that young people must depended too much on their parents to make decision. On the other hand, others assert that today young people are better able to make decision about their own lives. According to my own experience and actual observation about life have led me to believe that all the young must reduce their dependence to their parents and make decision about their own life. I have many reason to prove my point.
The first and foremost consequential reason is the, all the young people depended to their parent in to childhood time and they must reduce their dependence to them because unfortunately parents are not always with us, and after the childhood time young people must make important decision of their life. one of the must important decision that must make without any ones involve is their field in the university because their future life and career depended on this choice. they are better to them that can redused their dependence to their parent which can take important decision of their life.
Another point that springing into my mind is that, as we mentioned earlier all the young people must make decision about their own lives. if they choice their way in life without involve their parents they are would show more responsibility on their choice rather than other times because their choose based on their interest, talent and like and that cause to they be responsible about their decision and work hard to be successful in their way. For example, I always make decision based on my parent’s interest and like and I never have been happy in any stage of my own life and don’t show any responsibility in any work because they were not my choice.
To sum it all up bay taking all the detail into consideration, all the young people must reduce their dependence to their parent and learn to take the decision of their life without involved any one. It’s very important and useful for them that they can make a decision about own life and work hard to be successful in their decision and if they failed they learn to be responsible about their decision. I hope that all the young people can make good decision in their life and be successful in their life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: One
...onship and dependence to their parents. one group of people believe that young peop...
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Line 1, column 516, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...e decision about their own life. I have many reason to prove my point. The first and for...
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Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...st and foremost consequential reason is the, all the young people depended to their ...
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Suggestion: One
... make important decision of their life. one of the must important decision that mus...
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Suggestion: They
...ife and career depended on this choice. they are better to them that can redused the...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: If
...st make decision about their own lives. if they choice their way in life without i...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...ork because they were not my choice. To sum it all up bay taking all the deta...
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Line 9, column 192, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...decision of their life without involved any one. It's very important and useful fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7896039604 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40860154159 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.366336633663 0.524837075471 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.9223892121 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.214285714 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.52277137775 0.236089414692 221% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.260638612933 0.076458572812 341% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12192920641 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.408706430208 0.150856017488 271% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990756820339 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.78 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.