TPO 45 In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Decisions that someone makes, are one of the most important factors in his or her life. Genuinely, they determines his level of success in the future. Although a plethora of people hold the opinion that nowadays, young adults are more independent, others disagree with this point of view. I, to a great extent, hold the viewpoint that today, youth make almost all of their decisions by themselves. Among countless reasons which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous one through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that in the present time, the young have a profitable access to the internet, which means that they are able to find a great deal of information about different objects. Therefore, they think that there is no need to consult with their parents due to the fact that they have an access to the others’ opinion and can follow one of them. To make a tangible example, consider a student who wants to apply in a university, yet he is not sure about this matter that which major is more useful. He can start searching in the web pages and utilize other individuals’ experiments. For example, he can read some alumni’s opinion about different majors in the web pages, which really helps him to make an excellent choice. As it is clear, young people are more independent today.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that parents are busier than they were in the past. Therefore; parents cannot spend enough time with their children and as a result, children do not have an opportunity to consult with their parents and have to decide by themselves. To cast more light on this matter, a research that has conducted by some scientists in my country has shown that almost 80 percent of parents spend just one hour pay day with their children. Definitely, in this short time children cannot effectively talk with their parents since there are a variety of objects they want to talk. Therefore, the young are forced to be independent and make decisions lonely.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that young people can make decisions about their lives better that they did in the past. This conclusion is due to this importance that not only are they more knowledgeable today but also most of them have no choice rather than being independent. Consequently, this assertion that youth are more autonomous is completely true.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'determine'
Suggestion: determine
...ors in his or her life. Genuinely, they determines his level of success in the future. Alt...
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Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'profitable access'.
Suggestion: profitable access
...hat in the present time, the young have a profitable access to the internet, which means that they ...
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Line 2, column 385, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
... parents due to the fact that they have an access to the others' opinion and can fol...
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Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... are busier than they were in the past. Therefore; parents cannot spend enough time with ...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...ves. To cast more light on this matter, a research that has conducted by some scientists i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, for example, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84841628959 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67647441316 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502262443439 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0790974087 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.789473684 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285112831814 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940344591899 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904700743511 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185110117212 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03115032033 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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