TPO 46 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Admiring celebrities is a phenomena that appeared centuries ago and is continuing till now. My parents and I all have our favorite celebrities. Nevertheless, in my opinion, I agree that celebrities are more important to young people than they are to older people.
First of all, nowadays people are way more easier to get information from the celebrities and to be influenced by them. In the past, we could only expose to the news of celebrities through television or newspaper. In comparison, we can peek celebrities' life through social media everyday. Due to keep appearing in people’s life, celebrities can make people eager to copy their life. To take myself for an example, I have followed my favorite singer, Jolin Cai, on Instagram. When I see her shares new clothes, my desire of having the same clothes arouse. Thus, my shopping behavior are being affected by the celebrity.
Secondly, celebrities that older people love are rarely still active, so older people are not that enthusiastic on chasing stars. Most of us have celebrities crush on celebrities who are similar to our age, but celebrities normally retired earlier than normal people. For example, my father have loved multiple singers during 1980. Those singers are now all over fifty years old, and most of them are rarely perform in the public or appear on social media. Hence, he will only pay attention to their news one in a few years.
Admittedly, in recent years, people can become famous easier through multiple platforms, such as Instagram, YouTube, or even memes. That is to say, more and more people become famous and have power to influence people from any ages. However, older people are mature enough to not be affected by celebrities they just known even though they are at the same generation from my perspective. Older people are more experienced that make them hard to admire other people.
To sum up, celebrities are more important to young people than they are to older people.
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- TOEFL T P O 11 Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TPO 21 independent writing 3
- TPO 46 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people 70
- TPO 48 independent writing 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a phenomenon' or simply 'phenomena'?
Suggestion: a phenomenon; phenomena
Admiring celebrities is a phenomena that appeared centuries ago and is cont...
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Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
... First of all, nowadays people are way more easier to get information from the celebrities...
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Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...k celebrities life through social media everyday. Due to keep appearing in people’s life...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'performed'.
Suggestion: performed
... years old, and most of them are rarely perform in the public or appear on social media...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98489425982 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67678148811 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549848942598 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.827818815 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.5 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.55 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31357502557 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102043963266 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111697248333 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22199360679 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803578987909 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.