Traveling is a paramount method for any family to relax and get enjoyible time, it is consider as a crucialthing for life to pursuite of happiness, furthermore traveling is a way of entertainment, whether people benefit more from visiting their own home than athor countries or versa versa, this can be weighed in many aspects. To me I concur with the statement that visiting foreign countries is more beneficial. Admittedly, traveling to our cities and towens is a substaintial thing, to be familiar with our important artifacts and tourist areas. traveling abroad is more important, in the following paragraph I will elaborate to a couple reasons to explain why I believe that.
First and possibly the paramount reason, traveling to a differant places is very benefacial, this is mainly due to the fact that, by doing so will enable us to see a cultures and lifestyle of the country, in addition to their traditional clothes anf food, for instance, last sumer we visited Turkey, during our visit, we ate in many restuarents, my family like their food especialy kabob, thereore, after we came back, we usualy cook this type of meal, however, I can take this recipe from any website, but we can not verify it test, as you can see, traveling to foregin countries is beneficial to me.
Another point springing to my mind, there are alot of advantages from traveling abroad, this will extend our horizone about world, I give as apportunity to make a new and different friend, that help as to gain a new skills and knewlege from fmany cultures. moreover, we can share a lot of information about our country, likr the beuatiful areas thal we have, in additionn to the tourist regions, therefore this may encourage them to visit our country, in this way will improve our economy. in conclusion visiting other countries has advantages not only to us but to our country.
To sum up, the statement that people benefit from traveling to their town more than foreign countries is not as persuasive as to it stands, due to the exposition I mentioned above about the advantages and benefit that people get from going outside their countries.
Traveling is a paramount method for any family to relax and get enjoyible time, it is consider as a crucialthing for life to pursuite of happiness, furthermore traveling is a way of entertainment, whether people benefit more from visiting their own home than athor countries or versa versa, this can be weighed in many aspects. To me I concur with the statement that visiting foreign countries is more beneficial. Admittedly, traveling to our cities and towens is a substaintial thing, to be familiar with our important artifacts and tourist areas. traveling abroad is more important, in the following paragraph I will elaborate to a couple reasons to explain why I believe that.
First and possibly the paramount reason, traveling to a differant places is very benefacial, this is mainly due to the fact that, by doing so will enable us to see a cultures and lifestyle of the country, in addition to their traditional clothes anf food, for instance, last sumer we visited Turkey, during our visit, we ate in many restuarents, my family like their food especialy kabob, thereore, after we came back, we usualy cook this type of meal, however, I can take this recipe from any website, but we can not verify it test, as you can see, traveling to foregin countries is beneficial to me.
Another point springing to my mind, there are alot of advantages from traveling abroad, this will extend our horizone about world, I give as apportunity to make a new and different friend, that help as to gain a new skills and knewlege from fmany cultures. moreover, we can share a lot of information about our country, likr the beuatiful areas thal we have, in additionn to the tourist regions, therefore this may encourage them to visit our country, in this way will improve our economy. in conclusion visiting other countries has advantages not only to us but to our country.
To sum up, the statement that people benefit from traveling to their town more than foreign countries is not as persuasive as to it stands, due to the exposition I mentioned above about the advantages and benefit that people get from going outside their countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78573596021 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546703296703 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 152.759877739 48.9658058833 312% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 196.444444444 100.406767564 196% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.4444444444 20.6045352989 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 5.45110844103 257% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362361262558 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150662619343 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.200640013157 0.0737576698707 272% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233096849827 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170960796316 0.0645574589148 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 11.7677419355 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 58.1214874552 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 10.1575268817 186% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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