at universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
There is a widely held perception that students should concentrate on individual exclusive curriculum of field of their study at universities and colleges. Sports and social activities are considered as leisure pursuits having no position on curriculum. Despite the general beliefs about none-inclusion of sports and social activities in curriculum, it is my firm conviction that sports and social activities as integral components of people’s life should co-exist with other educations in universities and colleges. In what follows, I will elaborate on this why I think so.
First and foremost, the reason why sports and social activities should receive equal financial support as classes and libraries at universities and colleges is that human character is multidimensional. All of human character’s dimensions can be simultaneously improved, and universities and colleges, as places of educating and progressing individuals, are the best environment for personal progress. Moreover, Four-year of spending time on improving characters can be sufficient for a student to attain maturity. My own experience as a student is a compelling example of this. During my four-year education, the university gave me an opportunity to communicate with other students in three different countries educating the same field as I did, to work on the same project. Well, this opportunity given by university thought me how to associate others on controversial topics. In spite of the huge costs had for the university, I could make a character progress.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that high universities tuitions and life expenses put students in financial trouble. Thus, some of them maybe aren’t able to afford taking part in sports or social activities. If universities financially support these types of activities, equality will be established, and all students stay in the same position to decide which activities they prefer. Additionally, some students would run their own business or have a profession while educating ,so they won’t have enough time to participate other activities. Universities and college can be a solution to problems mentioned before by adding sports and social activities to curriculum. For instance, the university I’ve educated had built a huge sport center with all facilities which has been free for students, and students had to register for a field of sport that they tend to every semester.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that universities should financially support sports and social activities, since they are as imperative as classes and libraries. This is because students are encouraged to become more mature, and because students can participate activities without concerning about time and money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an character is multidimensional. All of human character’s dimensions can be simu...
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Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to take'.
Suggestion: to take
...ome of them maybe aren’t able to afford taking part in sports or social activities. If...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ess or have a profession while educating ,so they won’t have enough time to partic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58432304038 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22702072398 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513064133017 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2827316782 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.736842105 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340825121867 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112114000798 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146285765041 0.0737576698707 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218865498057 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132668063093 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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