universities should allocate most of their budget to improve the quality of food for students or provide them with extracurricular.
Nobody doubts that providing adequate opportunities for every person in the community in one of the most significant tasks of the government in each country. Recognizing and developing the talents of the students as the futures of the society by providing them with the best facilities available around is the inherent goal of the universities as a part of the government. Germane to this fact, a question that is matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether universities should give a higher fraction of their financial resources to make the food quality of the students better or supply the students with better extracurricular. Despite the fact that some students might think that improving the food quality comes first, I'm personally on the conviction that providing better extracurricular and more advanced educational equipment takes precedence over the previous opinion.
One compelling reason deserving to be mentioned is that better educational equipment can improve student's skills and that can bring better occupation positions for them. Therefore, students later can have a better life and this is a primary purpose of studying in a college. It is obvious that Better educated students can be more creative and the universities can help the students to develop their creativity with better facilities. Consequently, these students can use their well-trained skills to aid their country in the future by contributing to their culture, economy and many other aspects of the nation.
Another point which is equally important, if not more, is that better extracurricular can keep the students mentally and physically healthy. It is evident that studying is a tiring mental work and it can make the students exhausted after a while if they don’t have sufficient breaks and don’t get away from their courses in certain times. Universities can provide the students with some extracurricular such as gym equipment to keep them physically healthy or music concerts to enhance their mentality or drama halls for short break from real life which can takes student's tire away from them. And as a result, students' performance can be significantly improved.
Another moot point which is crucial to be mentioned is that students are not like machines and they have many aspects to be noticed. To delineate, students should learn life skills such as communication abilities, making friendships, problem solving and so on and having better extracurricular is a big step toward that achievement. Because extracurricular activities can make this opportunities available for the students to meet one another in a friendly environment and get to know each other better and make intimate friends in a safe group. these activities can assist the students to discover their hidden talents and they can face the real life problems better.
To recapitulate, extracurricular activities can improve student's lives in many ways inter alia, occupation opportunities, physical and mental health and social behavior. Thus universities should place the extracurricular in center of their attention and allocate a considerable fraction of their finances to this significant matter. Although some students might have a big interest in food, but with respect, the importance of extracurricular activities overshadows that of the former. And as a regular gym-goer, I personally, take comfort in having a better gym club in my university.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243150684932 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.143835616438 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.11301369863 0.0866891130778 130% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0376712328767 0.046263068375 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0376712328767 0.0685040099705 55% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119863013699 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0325342465753 0.0351676179071 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.16324613111 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.027397260274 0.0309702414327 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.111301369863 0.0887237588012 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0342465753425 0.0209618222197 163% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00684931506849 0.0139019557991 49% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3435.0 2387.08602151 144% => OK
No of words: 536.0 408.028673835 131% => OK
Chars per words: 6.40858208955 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.410447761194 0.338922669872 121% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.330223880597 0.251872472559 131% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.251865671642 0.174417080927 144% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.158582089552 0.112833075102 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16324613111 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462686567164 0.524397521467 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.3207157147 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.8 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0402782124 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.75 120.699889404 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.55 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 59.8223880597 45.7405998639 131% => OK
Elegance: 1.8046875 1.45489161554 124% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409263654929 0.300154397459 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144067088117 0.103427244359 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0785627047739 0.0752933317313 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.586040355091 0.497263757937 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0970300530448 0.151897553556 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159858624436 0.114077575197 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111741264883 0.0781384742642 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.426479287282 0.336927656856 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0399886606015 0.067059652881 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266237445306 0.210909579961 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936439988287 0.0618886996521 151% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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