You have the opportunity to study abroad in any country for a semester. Which country would you choose? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
Education is the most indispensable factor in young peoples' success in the future because with a suitable education they can guaranty a bright future for themselves. Generally speaking, I believe today's parents are much more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
First of all, schools in the present time involve parents much more rather than before. Nowadays parents are much more vulnerable regarding their children problems for reasons like that they live in worse society compared to their childhood time, they are too busy with their occupation and both parents mostly work outside to support the family. All these factors make parents be more concerned about their children. Consequently, schools act more careful to satisfy these strict parents, so if any small problem occurs, they involve parents. I can recall a memory from 2 years ago about my little brother who is 14 years old now. One day my brother's science teacher called my mother and asked her to go to school right away. When my mother came back, she was shocked because the teacher only wanted to tell my mother that my brother was little sleepy at the class that day and there was no bad behavior or low grade. When I compared this situation with experiences I had in high school, I was shocked too. At our time, schools did not involve parents in routine matters, which could be solved in school. As you can see, schools these days force parents to be more involved with anything that may have a connection with their children education.
In addition to the importance of schools in involving parents in their children education, students are not so prone to study, so their behaviors make their parents interfere with their education process more than they should. Children now are more concerned with music, technology, and sport compared to their education. Certainly, there are students who are so rational in this matter. Their time allocation for their hubbies and their study time is so wise that no one can judge them. As a result, their parents would not be so concerned about their education. However, I will be the first to admit that most students now are interested in anything rather than education and school. As a way of example, my brother always uses his cell-phone to play online video games. These games take all of his time and he is not dedicating enough to his study. My parents have always banned him from using video games and they have always checked him to see if he is studying or not. This example shows how much children behaviors and irresponsibility toward their duty as a student makes their parents be more involved with their education.
In conclusion, based on reasons explored above I am off to say that parents involvement with their child's education are getting higher each day not only because schools have a great impact on the parents, but also young people are not so into education compared to past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 999, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...studying or not. This example shows how much children behaviors and irresponsibility...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86706349206 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47070818502 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480158730159 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6899345157 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.652173913 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9130434783 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0494284285646 0.236089414692 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0173689680035 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0241558638994 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0323115588696 0.150856017488 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00987381743388 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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