summarise the points made in the lecture,being sure to explain how they cast doubts on specific points made in the reading passage.
in the reading passage three reasons about using hydrogen-based fuel instead of internal combustion engine associated to cars were stated in order to indicate that replacing hydrogen-based fuel will be more profitable,while in the listening section lecturer argued that some reasons stated in the reading may not be correct,and also mentioned other contradictory ideas.
according to the reading passage,three reasons prove that applying hydrogen-based fuel can be better alternative rather than internal-combustion engines.the first,because internal-combustion engine relies on petroleum,which is infinite resource,some day we will ran out of oil,while hydrogen needed for fuel-cell engines can not be depleted easily.the second,hydrogen-based fuel cells may solve many pollution problems.in other words,because the only byproduct of hydrogen-based fuel is water,it will not pollute the enviroment.the third,fuel-cell engines will be economically in case of spending less money.
while in the listening section,speaker pointed out that although details in the reading passage is correct,but it has some problems.the first,hydrogen-based fuel is not a good solution,because hydrogen is not easily available.to clarify,it is not directly available because it requires pure liquid state,which is difficult to obtain and requires sophisticated cooling technology.the second,hydrogen-based fuel is not a good solution,because not solve the pollution problems.moreover,it is necessary to have purified hydrogen,which requires lots of energy.the third,it is not necessarily cost saving,because it contains platinium in order to produce electricity,and paltinium is expensive material.while other materials are not useful for this method.
- Summarise the points made in the lecture being sure t explain why they cast doubts on specific points made in the reading passage 3
- TPO 38 integrated writing skill 70
- TPO 31 independent writing skill 3
- TPO 43 integrated writing skill
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them Today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and examples to su 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, third, while, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 233.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.44206008584 5.08290768461 127% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.3272445724 2.5805825403 168% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605150214592 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.55342163355 129% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 1.25165562914 719% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 13.0662251656 23% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 77.0 21.2450331126 362% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 157.583840119 49.2860985944 320% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 500.333333333 110.228320801 454% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 77.6666666667 21.698381199 358% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.6666666667 7.06452816374 363% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 33.0 4.19205298013 787% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0706624681659 0.272083759551 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586418042343 0.0996497079465 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027406076142 0.0662205650399 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0586418042343 0.162205337803 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027406076142 0.0443174109184 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 47.7 13.3589403974 357% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -40.52 53.8541721854 -75% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 21.2 5.55761589404 381% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.0 11.0289183223 345% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 21.26 12.2367328918 174% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 13.35 8.42419426049 158% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 10.7273730684 294% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.8 10.498013245 312% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 11.2008830022 196% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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