TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

The articles discusses about the famous dutch painters of the seventeenth century the Rembrants and support by 3 reasons. The professor, however, indicates that the painting didn't work by Rembrants and aren't convincing and refutes each of the author's reason. However, their is doubt whether some paintings attributed to rembrants through their style and the woman portraits that is muck like.

First, the articles suggest that the paintings are inconsistent about the way the woman dressed.She was wearing a white linen cap of a kind that servant would wear and yet a coat she's wearing has a luxurious fur collar that no servant can afford, on the other hand, the professor states that the fur collar wasn't part of the original paintings that it was on top of the original paintings that He concludes that it is one way to increased the value of paintings.

Second, the articles claim that the rembrants master of painting has a light and shadow that doesn't fit together that appears to be illuminating light that reflected into the below of the fur collar that makes it in dark color which absorb the light rather than refelect on it, so the painting is an error that the back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a panel glass that is made of several piece of wood glued that resulted to removal of the paintings on the rembrants catalog however, the professor refutes the reason .He states that the wood panel was enlarged with extra wood pieces that looks more grandious and valuable for the original paintings.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: didn't
...r, however, indicates that the painting didnt work by Rembrants and arent convincing ...
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Suggestion: aren't
...he painting didnt work by Rembrants and arent convincing and refutes each of the auth...
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Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
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Suggestion: there
...es each of the authors reason. However, their is doubt whether some paintings attribu...
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Suggestion: She
...sistent about the way the woman dressed.She was wearing a white linen cap of a kind...
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... that servant would wear and yet a coat shes wearing has a luxurious fur collar that...
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Suggestion: wasn't
...he professor states that the fur collar wasnt part of the original paintings that it ...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...of painting has a light and shadow that doesnt fit together that appears to be illumin...
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Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun piece seems to be countable; consider using: 'several pieces'.
Suggestion: several pieces
...ainted on a panel glass that is made of several piece of wood glued that resulted to removal ...
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...owever, the professor refutes the reason .He states that the wood panel was enlarg...
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Suggestion: He
...ever, the professor refutes the reason .He states that the wood panel was enlarged...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, look, second, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 262.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82442748092 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47431888565 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526717557252 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 21.2450331126 245% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 220.818839776 49.2860985944 448% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 252.8 110.228320801 229% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.4 21.698381199 241% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.2 7.06452816374 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451296837428 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202789050566 0.0996497079465 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137329683968 0.0662205650399 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292975846667 0.162205337803 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102587549456 0.0443174109184 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.5 13.3589403974 206% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 35.62 53.8541721854 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 11.0289183223 192% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.498013245 217% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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