TPO45- the evidence of the existence of bees more than 200 million years ago.

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TPO45- the evidence of the existence of bees more than 200 million years ago.

Submitted by mah1369 on Thu, 10/11/2018 - 10:37

The passage and lecture both discuss several arguments of the existence of bees before 200 million years a geo. The reading passage asserts that the discovery of fossil structures which are similar to bee nests support the existence of bees before 200 million years ago. Some of the skeptics hold the opposite view and support their idea by some arguments. However, the lecturer finds all the ideas dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all.
Firstly, the passage argues that the oldest records related to actual bees which have been found belong to 100 million years ago that is 100 million years less than the ones founded in Arizona. On the contrary, the lecturer brings up the idea that it was required some sticky liquid to reserve the bees while no resin was found 200 million years ago to make this possible.
Secondly, the passage reading states that no flowering plants existed in that time, and due to the close relationship between the evolution of bees and flowering plants it is impossible to the bees existed before 125 million years when the flowering plants have appeared. Conversely, the lecturer underlines the fact that some early bees such as ferns and panchery existed in that period. Also, the relation between bees and flowering plants is backed to the time when the flowering plants appeared and bees' feed adapted to that situation.
Finally, the passage claims that based on the fossil structures founded there is no similarity between the spiral pattern of modern bees' nests and what was found. I fact, it is guessed that the fossil structures were not made by bees. In contrast, the lecturer dismisses the issue due to the fact that the chemical evidence reveals there are no chambers. !!

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...e of bees before 200 million years ago. Some of the skeptics hold the opposite view and sup...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93150684932 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32751993899 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486301369863 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0934710362 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06452816374 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0568265659348 0.272083759551 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289024105737 0.0996497079465 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0230022802546 0.0662205650399 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0369677308978 0.162205337803 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00844928174975 0.0443174109184 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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