your city has decided to build a statue to honor a famous person in your country, who would you choose?
Celebrities have constantly received considerable attention in every society. Different countries have various ways by which people show their respects to some important men and women who have made great changes in their lives and their countries. Whit this in mind, who would you like to be built, if a new monument of a reputable people will be built in your city? Different people might have various views. As far as I am concerned, I were one who had a chance to choose a famous person in my country to build a status for, I would select Amirkabir, who was one of the major men in Iran, who was not regarded as well as he has deserved, for several reasons, three substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason to make AmirKabir worthy of admiration to me has to do with his trying to enhance people’s knowledge in Iran. He established the first high school in Iran, which its name was Darorlfounon, which was the first high school where the newest scientific principal and difference knowledge about engineering and medicine were being taught there. Moreover, he had hired European famous teachers to teach students. Setting up Darorlfonoun was his first step toward Iran’s economic and industrial development; hence the country’s economic growth.
Another rationale to endorse my point of view is AmirKabir’s policy-making. He run the country in an excellent fashion. Although he was living at the time in which most of the government ruling the society had only one aim to achieve: making their bags full and none of them paid attention to people, he managed to not only broadly reform bureaucratic, but also to eradicate financial and administrative corruption; additionally, he improved relationship between Iran and other countries, and formulated policies by which Iran could win its independence.
Last but not least, another factor which distinguishes AmirKabir from others to me—or, to put in another way, the key component, is his personal qualities. Even though, he was from a poor family, he attained his position and his proper life thanks to his will power which he use from his childhood. I think, his talent should be a role model of our lives.
To put it in a nutshell, I do believe that we need to admire the men like AmirKabir to propagate love of the country among people. Compared to our ancestors, nowadays, our lives seem to be more comfortable, and the credit of this convenience goes to the men and women such as AmirKabir
- TPO 34 70
- tpo 27 60
- At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. 85
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. 80
- The extended family is less important now than it was in the past 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...bir’s policy-making. He run the country in an excellent fashion. Although he was living at the time in ...
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Line 4, column 275, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
... life thanks to his will power which he use from his childhood. I think, his talent...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'as to', 'i think', 'such as', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225806451613 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.159139784946 0.158761421928 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.094623655914 0.0866891130778 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0387096774194 0.046263068375 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0860215053763 0.0685040099705 126% => OK
Prepositions: 0.094623655914 0.118717715034 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0344086021505 0.0351676179071 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.90114822057 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0494623655914 0.0309702414327 160% => OK
Particles: 0.00215053763441 0.00188951952338 114% => OK
Determiners: 0.0666666666667 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0150537634409 0.0209618222197 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0301075268817 0.0139019557991 217% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2495.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 420.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94047619048 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342857142857 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.257142857143 0.251872472559 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.202380952381 0.174417080927 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.15 0.112833075102 133% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90114822057 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.524397521467 111% => OK
Word variations: 70.6671156127 59.2087087015 119% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 24.7058823529 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.0690738847 48.84282405 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 146.764705882 120.699889404 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7058823529 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.644075263715 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 50.4201680672 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.25 1.45489161554 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279526532556 0.300154397459 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0749896863255 0.103427244359 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0631799099039 0.0752933317313 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.520435477116 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.197802828284 0.151897553556 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989102991769 0.114077575197 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809347670135 0.0781384742642 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.269547126375 0.336927656856 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0765368152796 0.067059652881 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166703952401 0.210909579961 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785368841977 0.0618886996521 127% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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