"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The argument that the Buckingham College should build new dormitories is flawed because of numerous assumptions that the argument fails to state.
In the first place, the argument refers to a trend that believes the enrollment to double within 50 years but fails to mention how much dependable the trend is. 50 years is a huge period of time within which the rate of increase of students may get saturated or even the number may start decreasing. It is not mentioned on what basis this trend is designed and it follows what statistics. The conclusion could have been supported if the passage had described about the reports on which the trends are made and how these trends will remain true even after such a long time.
Furthermore, the passage mentions about a hike in the average rent for apartment outside the campus. But this does not necessarily mean that the off-campus rooms won’t be affordable for the students. How many years is meant by the term “recent years” and how much change has been there in the economic condition of the students within these years? And will the college be able to provide dormitories in a much affordable cost compared to the hike in rent? The argument might have been more strengthened if the passage had mentioned all these data in numbers. Even then, there would have been a query if the students would like to prefer an in-campus dormitory in place of an out-campus room.
Finally, the passage also says that new dormitories will attract more students to enroll at Buckingham. This arises a question if the students are going to be attracted just by the new dormitories. Being students, they might pay more attention on the academic qualities and research facilities of the college rather than just evaluating on the basis of lodging facilities. Moreover, does the college need more number of students to enroll for it? This would have been more applicable if the college had been planning for a promotional campaign to attract students to join Buckingham. The information provided for this cause is inadequate to support the fact the Buckingham needs to build new dormitories.
In conclusion, the arguments has failed to state numerous assumption that would have been required to support the conclusion that the Buckingham college needs to plan for new residential for students.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ndable the trend is. 50 years is a huge period of time within which the rate of increase of st...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'in conclusion', 'in the first place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230046948357 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.18779342723 0.15541462614 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0727699530516 0.0836205057962 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0446009389671 0.0520304965353 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0093896713615 0.0272364105082 34% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117370892019 0.125424944231 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0610328638498 0.0416121511921 147% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7325352052 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0399061032864 0.026700313972 149% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.136150234742 0.113004496875 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0328638497653 0.0255425247493 129% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0234741784038 0.0127820249294 184% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2346.0 2731.13054187 86% => OK
No of words: 391.0 446.07635468 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3273657289 0.378187486979 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.268542199488 0.287650121315 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209718670077 0.208842608468 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13810741688 0.135150697306 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7325352052 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 207.018472906 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475703324808 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 50.8766813566 52.1807786196 98% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 21.7222222222 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9666507785 57.7814097925 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.333333333 141.986410481 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 48.5764421711 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.68932038835 1.8405768891 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416018320223 0.441005458295 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151203722725 0.135418324435 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0772971607666 0.0829849096947 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.606882757722 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156438531185 0.147661913831 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178897350494 0.193483328276 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665855510013 0.0970749176394 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.458042322024 0.42659136922 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0542978045065 0.0774707102158 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279123820897 0.312017818177 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554279876798 0.0698173142475 79% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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