When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue that who is your favorite celebrity? People surly give various answers to this question. As far as I am concerned, I think that Mohammad Ali Kelly is the great man, who affects million of people, especially Muslims over the world. I take this selection on account for the following reasons.
First and the most important reason is that he as a role model for teenagers could encourage them to gain the deeper insight about what is happening around them, because a small event could be a turning point in their lives. I think that a synopsis of his biography could give some light to this topic. At the age of 12, Ali discovered his talent for boxing through an odd twist of fate. His bike was stolen, and Ali told a police officer, Joe Martin, that he wanted to beat up the thief. "Well, you better learn how to fight before you start challenging people," Martin reportedly told him at the time. After this event, Martin trained young boxers at a local gym, and soon began his boxing career. This small event changed his life and made it a great athlete in boxing, who acquired many achievements.
A further subtle point I must mention is that Mohammad Kelly expanded Islam in the Western countries. His successes in boxing made him a famous athlete, and people had exotic enthusiasm for perusing his news. At that time, His controversial decision to convert to Islam attracted public attention to this religious. A large number of people were interested in to become more familiar with this religious, and also some of Christian people changed their religious to Islam. In addition, His behavior was based on the teachings of Islam made people realize that Islam is a religion of peace, contrary to what people thought. I think that no one could be comparable with him in the respect.
Apart from points I made above, I think that he is a symbol of peace, which we need more in the 21st century. We are living in violence-rich environment, an every day we are witnessing a war is initiated in a corner of the world. In this condition, we need well-known people for promoting peace, while famous people unfortunately are passive in this matter. Ali later started a different kind of fight with his outspoken views against the Vietnam War. Religious beliefs prevented him to take part in the fighting. Although, he lost his world title and boxing license, I believe that he had a crucial role in ending o the war.
All above evidence supports the undeniable fact that you cannot find somebody that he affects million human spirits so much. Last but not least, I hope that people detect that differences always have existed, and the war is not proper solution for eliminating them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...Ali Kelly is the great man, who affects million of people, especially Muslims over the ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...ight before you start challenging people,' Martin reportedly told him at the time...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...boxing, who acquired many achievements. A further subtle point I must mention is...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...ted public attention to this religious. A large number of people were interested in to become mor...
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Message: Did you mean 'an everyday'?
Suggestion: an everyday
...re living in violence-rich environment, an every day we are witnessing a war is initiated in...
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Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...ou cannot find somebody that he affects million human spirits so much. Last but not lea...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t proper solution for eliminating them.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230337078652 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.15543071161 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0842696629213 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0355805243446 0.046263068375 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0861423220974 0.0685040099705 126% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.129213483146 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0280898876404 0.0351676179071 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56760642819 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0243445692884 0.0309702414327 79% => OK
Particles: 0.00374531835206 0.00188951952338 198% => OK
Determiners: 0.0973782771536 0.0887237588012 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0112359550562 0.0209618222197 54% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0149812734082 0.0139019557991 108% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2740.0 2387.08602151 115% => OK
No of words: 475.0 408.028673835 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76842105263 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334736842105 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.225263157895 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151578947368 0.174417080927 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.101052631579 0.112833075102 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56760642819 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551578947368 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 66.8802916657 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9584193559 48.84282405 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.6 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48 0.644075263715 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 41.5263157895 45.7405998639 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.39864864865 1.45489161554 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180777867922 0.300154397459 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0888119659846 0.103427244359 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0717071389401 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.45879372681 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118885006343 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666759977785 0.114077575197 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466942894553 0.0781384742642 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301988021702 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0882463313265 0.067059652881 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118740607148 0.210909579961 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436708048736 0.0618886996521 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.