A ten-year study of a group of 552 men from Elysia showed that long-term consumption of caffeinated black tea was associated with a much lower risk of stroke. Of these men, those who drank more than three cups of black tea a day had a 70 percent lower risk of stroke than those who drank no tea. These results suggest that health-conscious people should consume at least three cups of black tea a day, beginning early in life.
The author of this argument claims that the consumption at least tree cups of black tea per day can prohibit of the stroke. To support this recommendation the author cites the following facts. (1) A survey of a group of the men shows that long-term use coffined black tea decrease the risk of stroke. (2) This research shows men who consume three cups of black tea had 70 percent lower risk stork than others.( 3) the author stresses that all people should consume at least three cups of black tea beginning early in life. Close scrutiny of each of these factors, however, leaves that none of them lend credible supports to the recommendation.
First and the most important reason is that, the author provides no assurance that the survey on what the argument depends is statistically reliable. Likewise, the author gives not any information about the respondents such as their occupation, their ages, and their profiles as well as this research are done on one gender. Therefore, if the survey’s respondents are not representative of the overall population of all people, the author cannot rely on to generalize the research’s result to all people. In addition, the number of people who took part in this research may was too low to ensure that the consumption black tea is useful for all people.
Second, the argument relies on the assumption that the risk of the stork between men is low because of the consumption the three cup black tea every day. However, it is entirely possible the lower risk of the stork between these men is due to other factors such as their healthy, environment condition, regular exercises. In fact, one drinks three cups black tea everyday as well as he has routine physical activities, or he can work in the pressure- free environment. In this way, All of these causes can be influential for keep him staying health. Since the author has not clearly identified the cause of the decreasing the stroke possibility, I cannot be convinced that the consumption tea bleak is effective in this matter.
The third place, base on this fact drinking black teas is useful for men; The author infers that all people should consume at least three cups black tea every day, beginning early in life. However, it is not necessarily the case. It is possible that the consumption this tea has many negative effects on women, old people, or patients, and these problems have not been remedied. Although, common sense informs me that this relationship – drinking black tea and stroke—exists, the author must provide some evidence that survey’s result is right for all people, I can accept that the author’s final conclusion.
Finally, a series of problems with the argument arises from the scant statistical information on which it relies. The author does not provide information about the number of each group—those drink three cups black tea every day and those do not drink— of respondents, so that the author fails to consider that this research might reveal that those who do not drink black tea are at the high risk of stroke. In short, since the argument relies on very limited statistical information, I cannot take the author's recommendation seriously.
All above evidence supports this fact that the argument is flowed and therefore, unconvincing it stands. To strengthen the author must provide clear evidence that survey’s respondents reflect of all people. In order to assess this argument, it would be suitable to know about all factors are effective in this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 518, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...s of black tea beginning early in life. Close scrutiny of each of these factors, however, leav...
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Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...n fact, one drinks three cups black tea everyday as well as he has routine physical acti...
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Line 7, column 503, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...tistical information, I cannot take the authors recommendation seriously. All abov...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the authors recommendation seriously. All above evidence supports this fact th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll factors are effective in this issue.
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'well', 'as to', 'at least', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'in short', 'such as', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.261194029851 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.125373134328 0.15541462614 81% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0940298507463 0.0836205057962 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0432835820896 0.0520304965353 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0268656716418 0.0272364105082 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134328358209 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0194029850746 0.0416121511921 47% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.81136454397 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0149253731343 0.026700313972 56% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.135820895522 0.113004496875 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0208955223881 0.0255425247493 82% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00746268656716 0.0127820249294 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3545.0 2731.13054187 130% => OK
No of words: 589.0 446.07635468 132% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01867572156 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.57801047555 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334465195246 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249575551783 0.287650121315 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.181663837012 0.208842608468 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110356536503 0.135150697306 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81136454397 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 207.018472906 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44142614601 0.469332199767 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.8769806363 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 23.56 23.2022227129 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7658980782 57.7814097925 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.8 141.986410481 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.56 23.2022227129 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.76 0.724660767414 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 48.5175551783 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 2.12213740458 1.8405768891 115% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283204248618 0.441005458295 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121670063547 0.135418324435 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0687077363731 0.0829849096947 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.578174346093 0.58762219726 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133902228365 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137466881937 0.193483328276 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131715962899 0.0970749176394 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.418758708537 0.42659136922 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.105732366849 0.0774707102158 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201421390242 0.312017818177 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144790507317 0.0698173142475 207% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 11.0 5.36822660099 205% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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