tpo 46 intergrated
Both the reading and the lecture try to compare two different ways that doctors can record medical information of their patients. While the reading talks about the advantages of electronic databases and brings some reasons to support this claim, The lecturer finds all these ideas dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all.
First, the author argues that by using electronic databases, doctors can save some money. There is no need to pay a lot for a storage space in order to keep paper base data , and transferring and duplicating the data is easier and cheaper. On the contrary, the lecturer brings up the idea that doctors can not save a significant amount of money with the aid of electronic databases due to the fact that they always have to keep the papers as an emergency backup; therefore, they need to pay for the storage space.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that electronic databases can diminish personal errors in medical treatments that are usually caused because of improper transcription, illegible handwriting and so on. In contrast, the professor plays up with the idea that this new method, can not reduce mistakes owing to the truth that doctors still need to use paper in order to write down the treatment procedures. Office staffs are the ones who convert this data to the electronic form and interpret doctors' handwriting; therefore, it is possible for them to make mistakes.
Last but not least, the reading asserts that the usage of electronic databases makes it easier for medical researchers to access a wide range information they need because the data is already in the information format, which makes it possible to use them. Conversely, the lecturer dismisses this idea and believes that researchers can not access a wide range of data easily because many people want their data to be private and not be used in a research. There are strict laws about the usage of the information of each patient's treatment; for example, researchers need to get permission from them. This problem makes it hard for researchers to follow this trend and use information easily.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e space in order to keep paper base data , and transferring and duplicating the da...
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Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he electronic form and interpret doctors handwriting; therefore, it is possible f...
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Line 4, column 443, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...r data to be private and not be used in a research. There are strict laws about the usage ...
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Line 4, column 520, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...ut the usage of the information of each patients treatment; for example, researchers nee...
^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'conversely', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'in contrast', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25974025974 0.261695866417 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.142857142857 0.158904122519 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0831168831169 0.0723426182421 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0415584415584 0.0435111971325 96% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0337662337662 0.0277247811725 122% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111688311688 0.128828473217 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0181818181818 0.0370669169778 49% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.67436236349 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0467532467532 0.0208969081088 224% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00779220779221 0.00154638098197 504% => OK
Determiners: 0.12987012987 0.128158765124 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0155844155844 0.0158828679856 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00779220779221 0.0114777025283 68% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2126.0 1645.83664459 129% => OK
No of words: 356.0 271.125827815 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97191011236 6.08160592843 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.04852973271 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342696629213 0.374372842146 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.266853932584 0.287516216867 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.174157303371 0.187439937562 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13202247191 0.113142543107 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67436236349 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.539623497131 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.6772223818 53.8517498576 98% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0529801325 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.6666666667 21.7502111507 136% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9493818852 49.3711431718 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.166666667 132.220823453 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6666666667 21.7502111507 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.878197800319 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 56.3520599251 50.5018328374 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.78571428571 1.90840788429 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.522623303432 0.549887131256 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.15610854136 0.142949733639 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0711150870359 0.0787303798458 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.634987199765 0.631733273073 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128769703406 0.139662658121 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.261029766326 0.266732575781 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612674945879 0.103435571967 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.489813421344 0.414875509568 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0477240158021 0.0530846634433 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.3950817333 0.40443939384 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286577183327 0.0528353158467 54% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 3.49668874172 172% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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