The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.
"According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
In the following argument the author has addressed an issue and evaluated on why the problem has occurred . Although the reviews obtained were positive the super screen produced movies experienced a downfall in the number of viewers . This cause of this problem has been attributed to the insufficient advertising plans and lack of awareness among the viewersabout the release and quality of the movie.This conclusion is not coherent.
However this might not be the only cause. Other reasons because of which good movies are not being watched may be due to previous records of the producing company .If the earlier released movies had bad reviews after many watched them ,the interest in the viewers to watch another movie from the same producing company would have plunged down . Even though certain movies in the past would have topped box office ,Movies released prior makes an impact on the viewers mind to not watch the next movie .
One other reason may be due to the actors and actresses working in the movie. Many viewers watch the movies in which famous and versatile actors have enacted the story .It is either because of the fame of the actor or the quality of their acting that people rush to cinema halls in abundance to watch the movie.Lack of such actors would not attract viewers to watch the movies.
Yet another reason may be the dates of release, factors such as holidays and competition from production companies effect the viewers and put them in a dilemma. if the production house in competition have released high grossing thriller movies in the past ,people are drawn towards it and this reduces the viewers for one of the companies.
With the following causes explained I would like to suggest that in order to increase the viewers one must take into consideration factors like movie release dates, competing production house . Its is also necessary to employ a good advertising strategem to create awareness among the people about the content and release dates of the movie. movie.
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...content and release dates of the movie. movie.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.27323943662 0.25644967241 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.169014084507 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.087323943662 0.0836205057962 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0253521126761 0.0520304965353 49% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0169014084507 0.0272364105082 62% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12676056338 0.125424944231 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0535211267606 0.0416121511921 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48931233482 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0338028169014 0.026700313972 127% => OK
Particles: 0.00281690140845 0.001811407834 156% => OK
Determiners: 0.140845070423 0.113004496875 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0253521126761 0.0255425247493 99% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00845070422535 0.0127820249294 66% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2016.0 2731.13054187 74% => OK
No of words: 342.0 446.07635468 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.89473684211 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.37134502924 0.378187486979 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.27485380117 0.287650121315 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.149122807018 0.208842608468 71% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0964912280702 0.135150697306 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48931233482 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 207.018472906 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508771929825 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 53.2448090904 52.1807786196 102% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.039408867 65% => OK
Sentence length: 26.3076923077 23.2022227129 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.5398073273 57.7814097925 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.076923077 141.986410481 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 23.2022227129 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.538461538462 0.724660767414 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 3.58251231527 502% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 53.7930724247 51.9672348444 104% => OK
Elegance: 2.14666666667 1.8405768891 117% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471567984604 0.441005458295 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.178727940546 0.135418324435 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0649432790008 0.0829849096947 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.688538698184 0.58762219726 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.190547282962 0.147661913831 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.234126735675 0.193483328276 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771929632854 0.0970749176394 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.468523455908 0.42659136922 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0888231371198 0.0774707102158 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329975873538 0.312017818177 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292112814893 0.0698173142475 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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