The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author recommends that Monarch Books open a cafe in its store given that it has a large customer base. The argument has certain flaws in its reasoning.
To begin with, the author assumes that opening a cafeteria will attract more customers. Monarch Books have been popular for their wide selection of books. Customers are attracted to Monarch for their quality of books and not because they have a cafe in their store. Feedbacks can be taken from customers on whether having a cafeteria will improve the services of Monarch. The owners of the store must also study the availability of cafeteria in its vicinity.
The author also assumes that the children's book section can be removed as the national census indicated that there was a significant decline in the percentage of population under the age of 10. The major flaw here is that the author assumes that the percentage is a good measure of statistics to represent the population under the age of 10. There could have been population increases and the number of people below the age of 10 could have actually not declined. Moreover the author assumes that children novels are restricted to the people under the age of 10. Actual numbers of children under the age of 10 could be considered as a reliable measure than the percentages.
Additionally, the author also compares the success of Regal Books to Monarch Books. There could have been various other factors determining the success of Regal Books. Monarch Books differ from Regal Books in locality, type of customers, availability of a cafeteria in its vicinity etc. The author must include these details before a comparison can be made.
In short, the argument is unconvincing and a decision to open a cafe in Monarch Books cannot be made unless the author intends to add more details to support his argument.
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: Moreover,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, moreover, so, in short, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 310.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91935483871 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61359807567 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454838709677 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9598969249 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7058823529 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294897171951 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109890140356 0.0743258471296 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110260566504 0.0701772020484 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195541965429 0.128457276422 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113529672526 0.0628817314937 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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