Issue-"people's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making."
The statement kept forward by the author speaks about the behavior of people, according to author people's behavior is not of their own making,rather people's behavior is largely determined by forces.I tend to agree with the statement presented by the author.
Firstly,I would like to discuss regarding behavior. It can be defined in variety of ways in accordance with different perspectives,It refers to the actions and reactions of a person on a certain situation or condition.humans behavior is influenced by culture, attitudes, emotions, values, ethics, authority, hypnosis, persuasion, coercion and/or genetics. It shapes the way a person thinks and this in turn results in different human behaviors.
Furthermore,Human is carried by his behavior.A child is always taught by his parents or elder people to behave properly as to make child able to react properly on certain situations and places.They are not their own making, In-fact they are the parents or other elder people who forces child behavior.In addition,it teaches child to handle or to tackle various difficulties which he will face in his life.For instance,if any child robs a pencil of his classmate,If his parents let him do that again without scolding or properly guiding the child.Then,robbing can become child's behavior and it will harness his future.
Although,their are countless forces that drive our behavior,But at sometimes,it becomes necessary for behavior to be of own making.Take an example of a politician such as Narendra Modi,if he takes any decision by considering large forces rather than his own making,It might go wrong.
Next,Their are positive as well as negative aspects of behavior driven by force.Lets take an example of team lead or manager of any company,he has to behave in a strict way to his employees rather then in lenient way,for the proper functioning of company.He is largely determined by forces.At this situation his behavior is not his own making.
To Summarize,People's behavior are very complex,We have to obey different laws and rules,Most of the times our behavior is driven by these laws rather than our own.They can be both positive and negative depending on both circumstances and time.
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