Some people think that families have the most powerful influence on children’s development. Other believe that other things have greater effects. Discuss both view and give your own opinion
As a matter of fact, children’s development has become a source of major controversy. While it is argued that, family plays an indispensable role in the growth of their kids, I am of the opinion that society has more impacts on children’s development than their parents.
On the one hand, there is a common consensus that, the importance of parents can not be denied in the development of children. Firstly, hardly can children resist the enticement of social evils without being taken care and educated by their parents since early age. For example, without the appearance of parents in educating and supervising children since childhood, they could be easily lured into social offense, ranging from steeling to murdering. Secondly, with the unconditional love received from family, children can be stimulated to realize their dreams as well as become more successful in the future. For instance, thanks to a great mother’s love, Thomas Edison could invent the bulb, which made him to become a greatest inventor in all time.
On the other hand, I believe that, the society has more impacts on the growth of children. The first reason is that, no sooner do children interact with Internet than their behavior is influenced by contents on social network. For example, if kids excessively exposure to unsuitable contents such as sex arousal videos or violent games, negative behaviors could be formed, which culminate in atrocious crimes, such as sex harassment or massacre. The next justification is that, by competing with friends, it’s likely for children to enhance their skill and complete themselves. Therefore, this benefit can provide assistance for children to seize opportunities of having a great employment with the view to ensuring their life in the future.
In conclusion, although both family and the society are advantageous for the growth of children, but it seems to me that the society has more positive impacts on kids than their parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 727, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...vent the bulb, which made him to become a greatest inventor in all time. On t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2641509434 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90645664169 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553459119497 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4414095688 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.769230769 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2307692308 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12424191585 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514717269707 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380295493406 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808471898477 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297481364847 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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