At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Opinions are divided on whether a much higher number of young adults recorded will be beneficial to several nations or not. It is my firm belief that while there are some disadvantages which may be witnessed, they will be outweighed by the benefits it may bring. This essay will discuss both sides of the debate and give explanations for my opinion.
It cannot be denied that various problems may be engendered by the far larger number of young adults compared to that of older people. Firstly, older people are usually the ones who have a variety of experience. If a company is lacking in some old managers, they will probably suffer from the absence of the specialized techniques and consequently find it difficult to thrive. The reason is that people who are much-aged have gone through a great deal in their life, so they know what is detrimental and pernicious. Secondly, in a society, it is common knowledge that older people are here to maintain all the traditional values of the nation. Specifically, they listen to folk songs, and are exposed to some religious beliefs of their ancients. Unlike them, the teenagers nowadays have a tendency to adopt a wide range of lifestyles and cultures from the foreign countries. As a result, without older people, the young people are likely to lead the country's traditional values towards a strange lifestyle of the other nation.
However, the large number of young adults may have a striking benefit. They are physically active, and consequently able to do some manual work that older people are not capable of doing. For instance, in terms of having to carry a lot of suitcases, people often give preferences to the young, due to their fitter body. Moreover, young people may have some real abilities that the elderly do not have. For example, when people get old, their voice changes and becomes quite unable to hear. As a consequence, the manager of the company would often choose the young people, the ones with audible tones, when it comes to the jobs include talking to the customers. The other merit that young adults may provide is that they are invariably more sensible and creative as far as a new problem is concerned. In specific, when people become older, they tend to suffer from a lapse of memory. In contrast to this, the minds of the young are still developing, causing them to have a number of ideas and opinions. As a result, in terms of working, instead of the conventional techniques of the elderly, they may become the people who advance more novel approaches at the problem, which may be increasingly effective.
To conclude, the issue has both drawbacks and benefits. However, I strongly support the idea that the latter far outweigh the former, for the 3 reasons that have already been clarified in the essay.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 1615.20841683 143% => OK
No of words: 478.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84309623431 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6175962623 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510460251046 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 506.74238477 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 3.0 0.384769539078 780% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.057608544 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.652173913 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193768367433 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565769485723 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05039857986 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103653106819 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513149581667 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 78.4519038076 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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