Young generation today prefer spending their leisure time in shopping centers instead of organized activities such as sport or music. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
In recent years, there has been a growing tendency that shopping centers have been attracted more young generation than activities such as sports or music. In my opinion, this is totally a negative development in young people’s life because of the following reasons.
One serious problem that can arise from spending most time in shopping centers instead of other activities is the money lavishment. The reason for it is that young adults spend money too much in their pleasures in shopping centers while they are too young in order to earning a living. As a matter of fact, psychologists argue that addiction in shopping which creates adverse behaviour can lead to several criminal dire effects such as robbery and stealing. In addition, this trend can impact in young people’s health. To be more specific, students who are playing sports have a healthy physique than other students, who enjoy spending time in shopping malls.
On the other hand, organizing activities such as sports or music brings a great number of benefits to young men and women more than shopping. First and foremost, by engaging sports or arts helps the youngsters to improve their health and spirit. In other words, sports activities are the best way to keep their shape, while art and music are the motivation for the mind. For instance, the study recently says that the youngsters who are not interested in any sports and arts can lead to depression. Secondly, participating in activities can help young generation to relieve stress. It means that spending young adults’s leisure time in this activities is beneficial to the brain, which helps relieve pain, tension and make them more happy in their life.
In conclusion. Although young men and women tend to prefer spending their entertainment time in shopping centers than organizing sports or art activities, I believe that this phenomenon is a detrimental development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 642, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ing young adults's leisure time in this activities is beneficial to the brain, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17307692308 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76937915082 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519230769231 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3649889477 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.285714286 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39099224298 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122151223944 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744597806118 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24648153419 0.151304729494 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00847964589797 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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