The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
When deciding the greatness of a country, we take the economic development and social welfare as a major standard. However, there is a disagreement among people which one comes first; whether the welfare of people or the achievements of leaders in different fields.
Admittedly, the achievement by leaders can have a far-reaching influence on people. For instance, in the 18th century, thanks to the development of the steam engine, U.K could develop more rapidly than other countries and initiated Industrial Revolution. If scientists were not endeavoring to the invention of steam engine, people in U.K would not have enjoyed its status as the world leading country. Besides, the invention of the light bulb could enable people to do something even in the night time. As it is proven in these examples, the invention by scientific leaders could have led to the increased well-being of people in the country.
However, the welfare of people should be the first standard determining the greatness of a nation. For example, in the 1970s of South Korea, Park Jung-hee was using more power than the president are supposed to be. To enlengthen his presidency, he corrected Korean Constitution several times and suppressed the voice from the opposition party. Even though his great achievement of rapid economic development, his authoritarian government degraded the virtue of democracy severely and the illegal behavior is criticized by people who see the history. When achievements of elites are emphasized as an indicator of a great nation, it might justify leaders' infringement on the value of democracy. For this reason, people's welfare is much more reliable standard to determine the greatness of a nation.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: To enlengthen his presidency, he corrected Korean Constitution several times and suppressed the voice from the opposition party.
Error: enlengthen Suggestion: lengthen
flaws:
No. of Words: 275 350 //minimum 350 words wanted
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5 //Minimum four paragraphs wanted
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Better to have 5-6 paragraphs with 3-4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4(optional)
para 6: conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 275 350
No. of Characters: 1402 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.072 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.098 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.923 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.865 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: K
... the development of the steam engine, U.K could develop more rapidly than other c...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: K
... invention of steam engine, people in U.K would not have enjoyed its status as th...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, so, then, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 33.0505617978 30% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 273.0 442.535393258 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97551809818 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575091575092 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1681970183 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.0 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230622062993 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836156950868 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698548801283 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149009768061 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659883106718 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.