In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the issue of parents' role in juvenile's life engendered copious controversies among people. Some people are inclinde toward the opinion that young people can make a better desicion about their lives today. However, some others may take an opposite view point and believe that young people depended too much on their parents today. As far as I am concerned, young people like student are not depended on their parents and there are more advantage for them to make their own decision. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that parents have more knowledge today. Nowadaye, the development of the technology happening at a very fast pace which leaded to many facilities for people to become educated. This advancement changes people's life and helping juvenile to make their own decision. For example, when a person want to chose her future job, he can use information on the internet or even buy a book about job and read it and this gives him a great perspective about all jobs and he do not need his parents guidance and are independence. In contrast, it was a tradition which forced children to persue their parents' job in the past and this take their right to make their own decision.
The second significant reason supporting my idea is that the number of offspring was higher in the past. Families in societies in the past have many children and they really depended in each other. For instance, my father has four brother and three sister and all of them grow up together and in arduous lifes in the past they always depended on each other. But parents prefer to have just one children todays. Therefore, this children from its school time learn how to make his decision by himself. Also, children have many friend this day and their friend have a crucial effect on their life. For example, a person who is the only offspring of a family should making friend because he do not have a brother or sister and whose parents are busy all the time. Furthermore, he finds friend and grow up with them and they make their own decision and this helps them to become successful in the future.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned argument, parents are not involved in their young people today and young people make their own decision. Consequenlty, it is highly recommended that let juvenil make their own path because it is necessary for them in hectic life and this taske help them to overcome problems. There is a myraid of other reasons, challenging the above statement, which could be mentioned but is not embraced due to the dearth of time.
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- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 60
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. 76
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 65
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 507, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...great perspective about all jobs and he do not need his parents guidance and are i...
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Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'brother' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'brethren', 'brothers'.
Suggestion: brethren; brothers
...other. For instance, my father has four brother and three sister and all of them grow u...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ve just one children todays. Therefore, this children from its school time learn how...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun friend seems to be countable; consider using: 'many friends'.
Suggestion: many friends
...ecision by himself. Also, children have many friend this day and their friend have a crucia...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... family should making friend because he do not have a brother or sister and whose ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78111587983 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53514775838 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495708154506 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0835290591 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.095238095 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1904761905 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.51076591575 0.236089414692 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149678712854 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140712788172 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335575324096 0.150856017488 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112716900916 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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