A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:
1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
It is a general rule that the more attention governments pay to education, the more successful a society can be. In this regard, myriad committees have been established in order to increase the knowledge of teachers. However, there are some arguments in the practical methods. Some prefer to teach teachers in some classes and some others want to use online courses for each teacher. In my own perspective, I do believe that online courses can be more effective. Two possible reasons are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First of all, with the advent of the internet, online materials can sufficiently save not only time but also money in many cases. In fact, the necessity of the presence of people decreases with the developing of new technologies. In this way, people can sit at their own desk in their private room and learn whatever they want by just clicking on some links and watching or reading some materials on the computers. For example, my father is a teacher, he also is the manager of an especial part of their school. His responsibility forces him to hold different classes for new teachers to increase their experiences. At first, he always attends numerous classes and because of the heavy traffic which we have in our city, he was always complaining about his situation. Due to the amount of money that he spends for gas and also the time he spends on commuting, he was not convinced of his income. However, once he used online courses through some websites, he was totally happy because he can easily stay at home and talk through Skype with other teachers. From that time up to now, my father becomes a big fan of the online courses.
Secondly, nowadays it is accepted by most of the scientists that individual training has more significant effect on the learners than the geranial ones. As a matter of fact, people have a different approach toward thinking and also learning, therefore, they use various types of education. This is exactly true for the current issue. Each teacher has a different method and can learn more efficiently in an especial way so it is logical to serve that kind of learning for them. For instance, there was a specific program in our company which was mainly related to improving the managers' ability in risk management. All of us were the force to attend a class, listen and take note while a professor was speaking continuously. Most of my colleagues lost their motivation to continue the training, although it was a completely interesting and important topic for managers. They mainly suggest that they cannot adapt themselves to the professor and they should have some courses more specific. In this regard, our supervisor decided to establish an online course that though it the managers can have their own individual training program which was absolutely a success for the company.
In sum, above form aforementioned explanation, it is obvious that I do believe online courses are more practical and effective. This is because of the money and time that can save perfectly and also the high effectiveness of individual training. That's why we should be aware of different aspects of online materials.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an especial way" with adverb for "especial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...t method and can learn more efficiently in an especial way so it is logical to serve that kind of ...
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Line 5, column 579, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...ich was mainly related to improving the managers ability in risk management. All of us w...
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Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...h effectiveness of individual training. Thats why we should be aware of different asp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, as a matter of fact, first of all, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92164179104 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75970108893 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496268656716 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9974088383 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7037037037 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8518518519 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130463678384 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372644278115 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459652808285 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757817379236 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357515635536 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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