it is a highly debatable issue that medical system development result in higher life expectancy for people but also create negative impacts on their life.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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it is a highly debatable issue that medical system development result in higher life expectancy for people but also create negative impacts on their life.
to what extent do you agree or disagree?

The development of medical technology still to be hot discuss on society who several of them believe that the technology will provide negative and positive effect. This essay totally disagrees with that statement, because the evolution of medical machinery will help to increase medical services in people and monitor the health of patient easier.

Healthy services in the community will be improved by the rising of technology on medical. That is to say that the medical record service on internet that connected in some hospitals will help clinics to know the data of patient and give the best service that suitable with the diagnosis in those data. Center of data on internet will help people to get service fast without recheck before they get next diagnosis. For example, according Google who involved 2000 patients from five famous hospitals in Canada that shared patient medical record. The medical records used to give services in new application that connected in those clinics.

The climbing of medical improvement will help doctor and nurse to control the public health. That is to say that doctor and nurse can use medical technology that linked information technology and computer to monitor heart rate, blood flow or examining organs in patients using x-rays. For instance, one of patient from International Hospital in Jakarta, in 2008, Sueharto, ex president Indonesia used modern technology to monitor and changed his heart that it only needed 3 hours for operate and 2 weeks to recovery. It has faster than normal operation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a several'.
Suggestion: who is a several
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, still, for example, for instance, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1305.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.566145748 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0618080473 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.636363636 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0829686822664 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339052661029 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0263804781435 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0659273638101 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318400230195 0.056905535591 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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