do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
playing computer games is a waste of time. children should not be allowed to play them.
with developing of technology, all aspect of our life are susceptible to its effects. one of the most sensitive and important technological sequences is its effect on children. I agree with that playing computer gamed is a waste of time, not only for its harmful effect on student studies, but also because of its physical and mental problems which occurs for children. in what follows I'll concisely elaborated on them.
1- first of all, we know sitting in front of computer for long period time has obvious dangerous sequences for body which nobody could reject them. for example, as the children are in growth age, bad sitting and deviation of spinal cord could cause many problems such as waist disc, sciatica pain and ... when they become older. eye weakness is another the prevalent outcomes of these plays. also an authentic ISI article which published by famous professors of Harvard university in 2015, has proven that those children who play more than 3 hours per day, are 15% more exposed to obesity than others and also vascular disease is more common in them.
2- secondly, mental distracts and problems is the most important reason that I disagree with this plays. children have strong power of imagination and it is very common that they imitate the characters and heroes which are in games. as those are virtual and their actions are out of access, this phenomenon could have very distractive and harmful effect on children such as anger, anxiety, narcissism and many similar disorders. about 3 years ago, a child in Iran imitated a characters of a game and it caused a fatal event for him.
3- finally, this games could prevent children to study not only in home, but also in school and simultaneous with teacher teaching. as the wave of these game enter to children mobile and many of them are much impressive that PC games even, it could be a serious menace for children future. If they couldn't study well, they would not get a good job and become successful in their life and it is also could have many psychological outcomes in both individual and social aspect of people behavior.
In conclusion, because of the detrimental effects of computer plays mentioned, I agree with statement that children should be prevented to play computer games. Instead of it, children could benefit exercises and other intellectual games which boost their mental progresses and abilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93564356436 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56492705256 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544554455446 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7832529457 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.777777778 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288941941695 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839120462309 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101700627255 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174719345224 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102564900899 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.