n the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
In today's modetn world, the issue of dependency of the children plays an increasingly pivotal role in every society in general, and in every family in particular. Since, parents always worried about the future of their child and do their best for the sake of the welfare of the children in order to have beautiful and nice life. While some belive that children are more dependant to their parents now than before, I am of the opinion that the children stay on their own feet in comparison to the past. I feel this way for some reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
To begin with, in recent world with its hectic lifestyle and economic recession, children become independant sooner than before. They stay on their own feet financially and even emotionally. I have observed the lives of the young these days and it sill be a compelling evidence for this issue. In my country, the young, after high school, have looked for job. Since, the have been an economic recessin in our country, and most family could not afford the cost of life. All things such as the rent of the house, the bill of the electricity, the expense of internet, to name but a few, have been costly and just the parents' wages could not support the whole members of the family. Hence, all the children after school should work and even gradually seprate from their parrents ,as well as live away. On the other hand, in the past, when my parents were child, their life revolved on only by the salary of my grandparents . In other words, parents could affored all the expense of the life by one source of the income.
Another paramount impportance of this issue which should be taken into consideration is that the modern world see the flowering of the science and tecnology. Thanks to the galloping progress of technology , especially advent of the Internet, and dissemination of beneficial imformation through all the world, the modern youth are much more knowledgable and exprienced than before. It is crystal clear that information and experience play a critical role in making the decent and proper decision. Hence, the exprienced and wise youth deserve to make better choice in theri lives.
In conclusion, by taking account all the above reasons and many others, I strongly believe that the young people have more abilities to make decision than before. Since, not only are they more knowledgable and resourceful, but they also become more dependant than before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8353221957 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54920157954 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520286396181 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3108683678 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.631578947 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63157894737 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252729689966 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669261332185 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582463070673 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133190296828 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392081266611 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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