Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends. a. joining a sports team, b. participate in community activities, c. traveling.
People often hold different perspective on which is the best for a student to make new friends.. Based on my personal experience and observation of life, I strongly argued that joining a sports team is the best way.
First of all, students care about self-image when making new friends, and joining a sports team can provide a student with the good self-image. For example, one of my classmates named John was the leader of the varsity basketball team. Needless to say, his skills for playing basketball were extremely outstanding. As a result, every time when he had a game to play, so many students would cheer on him without hesitation. In other words, he was the most popular boy in our school. Undoubtedly, almost every student wanted to make a friend with him.
Secondly, to make new friends, students put emphasis on money, and joining a sports team costs a little. For instance, I joined volley ball team when I was in university. I really had fun in playing volley ball in the team, and I made a lot of good friends here. In fact, I needed to pay some money for supporting our team, such as buying new equipment and holding the game with other schools. However, we did not have to pay any money as the registration fee to join the team. Actually, most sports team would not charge the
registration fee. Hence I only paid 10 US dollars for joining volley ball team per semester.
Last but not least, students focus on common interest in making friends, and joining a sports team can help them make new friends with common interest. For example, my brother was good at playing soccer. However, he had difficulty on making new friends when he was a freshman in senior high school. To solve this problem, I suggested him to join the soccer team because he could use soccer as common interest to make friends. As a start, he talked about how to improve sport performance and favorite soccer players with new friends. They even went to watch soccer games together in the end. Thus, he succeeded to make so many friends in the soccer team.
In conclusion, the best way for students to make new friends is joining sports team. That is to say, since students cares about self-image, money and common interest when they want to make new friends. It is best for students to join sports team.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65196078431 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4801547976 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468137254902 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5826800703 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.92 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.32 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397123883554 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141903805602 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126617908291 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265003712362 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120385493726 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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