Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for
any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement.
Learning a musical instrument often requires a long duration time. Thus, it could be a great achievement when children are able playing the instrument. I personally do entirely agree with this view, which I will explain below
On the one hand, I do appreciate that some people think differently saying that playing a musical instrument has more significant benefits. Firstly, youngster would naturally improve their patience and perseverance. This is apparently that learning the instrument would teach children on how to struggle through hours, months, and sometimes years of practice. For example, learning a piano instrument often spend at least four years of practice in general. Secondly, It seems to me that children's academic skills might improve as well. This is because learning musical instrument introduce young children to basic physics subject. For instance, playing non-string instruments, such as drums and vibraphone which provide opportunities for children to explore what are the scientific principles on the instrument. Furthermore, I believe that another benefit of playing instruments could foster open-mindedness about culture. Where children are given opportunities learning and playing a variety of music from all over the place, such as learning Jazz instrument, they might also learn the music background.
Looking for another perspective, it might be said that playing a musical instrument gives fewer benefits, this is due to children, in the future, have often a career that would be far different from music. However, having a talent to play musical instrument could help children determine their future occupation.
To conclude, I believe that playing musical instrument is beneficial, not only for children development but also for future career.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1045, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to jazz'
Suggestion: To jazz
...om all over the place, such as learning Jazz instrument, they might also learn the m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, at least, for example, for instance, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97263237045 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588888888889 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6157885667 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25350738301 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946283253294 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629789268613 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172856517067 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537595905245 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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