The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
A society can only reach it's highest potential if the individual segments of the society function with cohesiveness and synergy. As such, one of the driving forces for this type of prosperirty is, indeed, through the leaders of the scoiety.
History is ripe with examples of nations that flourish when the right leaders are at the reins. Certainly, leaders do not become who they are overnight. It is the constant and continous efforts of the society as a whole that nurtures such leadership to become the men they are. One of the most important qualities of a leader is that of cooperation. This unique characteristic brings people of the society together, instead of moving them apart. Leaders, whether they hold a position in the government, an industry or any other field - all require this trait. For example, in order to ensrue smooth operations, the enterpraneur of a cotton mill needs to maintain healthy ties with the labor union as well as the cotton mill's raw material supply. Such business relations can only be strengthened if all involved parties deal with each other in a coperative manner.
Competition on the other hand, can instill negativity, agression, hostility and
jealousy. Today, we see various fields of the same society competing against eahc other, instead of working together to make the society as a whole better. For instance, people compete for better jobs, better schooling, better houses and show little remorse in sidelining others. Some even go to the extent of using deceiption and cheat their way to the top. If leaders at the top are hostile and agressive, than the society as a whole sees it's trickle down affect.
However, one might argue that competition, if healthy, can indeed result in greater progress and properiety. it is due to sense of competing to achieve more that we see various third world developing nations produce and innovate some of the finests products in the world. Although, Pakistan has long way to go before it can be qualified to be part of the developed nations league. However, it is a well known fact that Pakistan's textile and sporting goods indistry is one of the best exporting industires in the world. It is indeed not a rare sight to find the "made in Pakistan" labels on products any time you gor linen shopping.
This all leadership roles, be it in any sector require a problem solving temperment that can only be attained through cooperation. It is up to the society to instill the trait in its individuals instead of turning them into opponents of eachother.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, then, third, well, for example, for instance, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9488372093 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74191561068 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551162790698 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1580911848 60.3974514979 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.7272727273 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194037045412 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480448974691 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0291093019077 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911741125447 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272175963127 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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