You will be moving to a new office soon. Write a letter to the general manager to request some necessary equipment for your future office. In your letter say– What equipment will you need and when?– Explain why you will need it.– Suggest where to ge

Essay topics:

You will be moving to a new office soon. Write a letter to the general manager to request some necessary equipment for your future office. In your letter say

– What equipment will you need and when?
– Explain why you will need it.
– Suggest where to get it from and why.

Dear Paul,

I am writing this letter to inform you that, I will be requiring a new business laptop and an international landline telephone for overseas calls before we start working from our new office building.

I need these pieces of machinery beforehand because I need to distribute my new office telephone number with the clients as this would help them to contact us without any trouble. Moreover, my existing machine is too slow with the configurations of the 19th century due to this the IT services department has approved to purchase a new laptop for my work and they have e-mailed you about the same as well.

I believe you will find these items from the Laptop outlets in the city market as they have a great variety of the modern laptops and landline phones.

I hope you would be able to manage these items in time.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

yours sincerely,
ABC

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...rations of the 19th century due to this the IT services department has approved to pur...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
...ng forward to hearing from you soon. yours sincerely, ABC
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, moreover, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 755.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 158.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77848101266 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51759550633 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 127.690721649 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.645569620253 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.3234144603 44.8134815571 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.857142857 76.5299724578 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 4.34317383033 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253656806274 0.216113520407 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1134807031 0.0766984524023 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424273288185 0.0603063233224 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133201416262 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412850860955 0.0580467560999 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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