TPO 37
There is no shortage of debate about whether it is better to focus on one thing at a time or doing many things together. In my opinion, it is more advantageous to focus on one thing. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will elaborate in the following essay.
First of all, Because we do many things together, we do not get enough time to do one thing in a proper way, and we ended up doing it oaky and not excel in it. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I am preparing for the doctorate exams. It requires much concentration and dedication to study each subject so that I can get the high score and get into dental school. But because of my age, my parents and relatives are forcing me to get married. I try to explain to them that I need at least six months of serious study for my exams. They ignored me and just a few days back they set me up for a date. I decided to do both things parallelly. I had wasted my time by choosing to do both things together because I did not prepare well for the exams and even I broke up with the guy. If I had not elected to do things together, I would have passed my exams by now and would have got a guy for marriage as I would be able to focus more on it after exams.
Second, often companies try to hire people with multitasking skills but what they do not notice that mind power gets reduced by focusing on many things together. For example, My father had hired an employee for the company. He took an interview for the four people and decided one base on his multitasking abilities. He used to do different works on the same day. Due to it, his sharpness of mental strength to solve the problem got blunted. Now, he is not able to address critical issues. My dad realized his mistake and decided to not to look for the multitasking person for the job. In fact, a recent study by the local university suggests that the 98% of the great work done by the people who focuses on one thing at the time.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that because people are doing many things together, they are not doing it correctly. This is because they will not be able to get enough time to do things well and their mental capacity will get reduce by multitasking work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...will elaborate in the following essay. First of all, Because we do many things ...
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... do not get enough time to do one thing in a proper way, and we ended up doing it oaky and not ...
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...e able to focus more on it after exams. Second, often companies try to hire peop...
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... who focuses on one thing at the time. In conclusion, I firmly believe that bec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, well, at least, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.20327102804 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38982374526 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483644859813 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2214270635 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.2173913043 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6086956522 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.08 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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