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Essay topics: Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed. However, some people think that zoos are useful for protecting rare animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Submitted by ali mirza qubla... on Sat, 10/11/2014 - 17:47
Zoos are an important asset of our society, some people think they are inhuman and should be closed while others argue that they are helpful in saving endangered species. I, however, agree to the former view but I also believe that they have far much more positive aspects which outweigh the existence of zoos.
on one side,there is a group of people who believe that zoos are cruel should be closed they strenghthen their view point by claiming that many people are visited to see the zoos they are a wastage of time and also the wastage of money so many people are come from various country and they are not attention towards our work they are focus on enjoyment.Zoos also cover the public placec which are illegal.
Looking on the other side of the discussion which reveals more of the beneficial aspects of zoos to our society, like its contribution towards education, entertainment, conservation and research of animal behavior and anatomy. Zoo is a prime place to make an animal safe from outside dangers like hunters who hunt them for their meat, fur or leather. Moreover, they are practically important in educating public about the animal behavior, anatomy and also from research point of view. People paying visits to these zoos help them to strengthen themselves from the money they earn from people. In addition to this, in zoos breeding the endangered species take place which helps them to increase in their number and avoids them to extinct. Taking an example of giant panda which inhabits in China, is an endangered species now, previously it was hunted for its fur but now after great development of infrastructure its losing its natural habitat by the process of deforestation. Establishment of zoos will save these species from dying out.
After analyzing both the perspectives, I am of the opinion that zoos have a strong advantage for both, the endangered species as well as for the society, but the animal's dignity should be maintained and they should not be exploited.
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- Give Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed. However, some people think that zoos are useful for protecting rare animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 67
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, moreover, so, then, well, while, as for, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0570719603 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5353861962 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54094292804 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5189355027 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.866666667 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8666666667 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.38176352705 228% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398737899019 0.244688304435 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148464031644 0.084324248473 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166125619048 0.0667982634062 249% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159825760166 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.269829144202 0.056905535591 474% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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