Players earn more money from games, whereas successful professional can make a big deal of money then people in another important profession discuss both views.
Sports are the major part of every country, and some famous players earn much more money from it. successful professionals can make a big deal of money than masses in another vital profession. I will going to discuss both views in upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, there is a group of people who believe that, players who are in successful sports profession get more money, rather than other important profession. They strengthen their viewpoint by claiming that, this is because of the effort they invested in their early life to achieve there goal. Also, they become famous with their talent and sports, and people started like them a lot. The best epitome of this is Usain Bolt. Usain bolt won 3 gold medals in Olympics. He just ran on the track , less than 2 minutes in his carrier. However, he made 119 million dollars with his achievement. No doubt, he spend 115 seconds on running track, but he prepared himself for this occassion from last 20 years, and that was his struggle.Also, there are many professional personalities like him. So, they are justified for this deal of money.
In contrast of this, there is a opposing group of people who believe that masses who work in other important profession also have their importance. To make the argument convincing they claim that other professional workers might be not famous as professional players, but this is not underestimated, that they have skills to do work, extremely. They should also earn much more money. All professions have there own value. As the phrase stated, no one is you and that is your power. So, people work in other higher profession must be given equal reputation because they do which is their job. If successful sports professionals get more money, it could be unfair for those, who worked in other valuable professions, in order to pay less money than professional sport players.This would be perfect illustration.
Nevertheless, weighing both the options, I believe that there is no single conclusion. Still, I take this ground that, an effective clap requires both use of hands. So, successful professionals as well as people who work in other profession should be given equal opportunities and get same amount of money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, well, in contrast, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97311827957 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77727544871 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543010752688 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.1210726005 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0909090909 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9090909091 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310882552902 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895811937276 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100409145967 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229367334231 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124648329937 0.056905535591 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.