Players earn more money from games, whereas successful professional can make a big deal of money then people in another important profession discuss both views.
Sports are the major part of every country and some famous players earn much more money from it. successful professionals can make a big deal of money than masses in another vital profession. I will going to discuss both views in upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, players who are in successful sports profession get more money rather than other important profession this is because of the effort they did in their early life to achieve this position. Also they become famous with their sports, people like them a lot. For instance, Usain Bolt won 3 gold medals in Olympics. He ran on the track in less than 2 minutes. He make 119 million dollars with there Olympics and he just run 115 seconds on track but he prepared him for this from last 20 years and it was his investment.Also ,there are many professional personalities like him. So they are justified for this.
In contrast, people who work in other profession also have importance. They might be not more famous but they have skills to do work extremely. They should also earn much more money. All the profession are there own value. One cannot do like other and other cannot do like one one. So, masses worked in other important profession must be given equal position. It could be unfair if successful sports professionals get more money other profession are be count in unless in order to pay more economy.
To conclude, in my opinion, successful sport profession are more valuable. If they do not earn more money from their sports, they become lost their interest and start taking interest in other profession.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
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Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...nce with, players who are in successful sports profession get more money rather than o...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ir early life to achieve this position. Also they become famous with their sports, p...
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Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...on the track in less than 2 minutes. He make 119 million dollars with there Olympics...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...last 20 years and it was his investment.Also ,there are many professional personalit...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... 20 years and it was his investment.Also ,there are many professional personalitie...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...much more money. All the profession are there own value. One cannot do like other and oth...
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Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: one
... do like other and other cannot do like one one. So, masses worked in other important p...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...als get more money other profession are be count in unless in order to pay more ec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, for instance, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1314.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81318681319 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57094325591 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.8783298797 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1666666667 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72222222222 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324476564547 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101357062707 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10029913568 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232081996286 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124271640287 0.056905535591 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.58950901804 77% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 78.4519038076 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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