It is commonly seen that many high school students plan and take a year vacation after completing their students. Some students show their interest to travel and others for work. This will discuss merits and demerits of holiday and career.
Students make a route map to travel places where they can relax, gaining knowledge on cities which are advanced as well as developed in economy, job and housing. On the tour, they were forced to spend money, which is useful for students to learn about money management and awareness for future spending in education and job such as purchasing books, purchasing motor vehicles. There are some drawbacks in year gap by travelling, for instance, students can lose a year and cannot compete with other children who followed in schools this will result in the state of depression and mental disorder for small period.
On the other hand, students choosing work in factory or office after school will help financially and work experience. Firstly, students can earn money on monthly basis and this will useful for purchasing book, other needs which they going to face in future. Secondly, they can understand the work conditions, safety procedures and precautions in work, this will considered as experience, which is helpful in future at the time of job hunting. Despite this, there is a chance that, students can become alcoholic when they mingle with senior co-workers and lose interest in education, losing control in education which will effect on poor results.
To sum up, students have freedom to take a year gap to travel cities and as a worker in factories or offices. I strongly recommend to travel which make them refresh than choosing work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and mental disorder for small period. On the other hand, students choosing wor...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...k, other needs which they going to face in future. Secondly, they can understand the work...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
...ures and precautions in work, this will considered as experience, which is helpful in futu...
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... losing control in education which will effect on poor results. To sum up, studen...
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Suggestion:
...on which will effect on poor results. To sum up, students have freedom to take...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to work'
Suggestion: to work
...l which make them refresh than choosing work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in fact, such as, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1212.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02904564315 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54502675937 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585062240664 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.6427818946 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.666666667 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7777777778 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8888888889 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255488847574 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116383428936 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577685632234 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175320869521 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265391420238 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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