Some people feel that entertainers such as filmt stars, pop music and or sport stars are paid too much money
Do you agree or disagree
*Some people feel that
It is argued that, celebrities such as movie stars, musicians and sportsperson, are earning way too much. This essay agrees with this view because they cause a lot of public nuisance and there are other professionals who deserve to be paid more.
To begin, Celebrities do not appreciate the value of money because they are heavily paid for something that is fun. Hence, they do not value the money they are being paid and they get intoxicated by it. They often spend anyhow, by throwing frivolous parties, over indulging in alcohol and experimenting with illegal drugs. Often times than not, they dominate our media with their scandalous behaviours for everyone to see, especially teenagers who have a lot of them as role models. If they are paid less, they will appreciate the worth of money and spend wisely and as a result causing less public drama. For example, a footballer once said that, he finds it ridiculous to be paid for something he enjoys doing. He also added that, he could do it for free. To further exemplify this, another UK based footballer is known to buying expensive cars and bashing them on the road driving recklessly.
Secondly, the salary of celebrities is not commensurate to the type of hard work required in their job. There are other professionals whose job are noble, more tasking and involves more risk compared to celebrities. For instance, health workers and the army to mention a few, expose themselves on a daily basis to dangers. A Doctors could contact a deadly diseases when saving a patients life, while, soldiers are at risk of being killed in there line of duty. Moreover, both doctors and the army are doing a noble thing by saving people's lives in different ways.
In conclusion, the amount of money Athletes, Artists and Actors earn should be drastically reduces since they wastefully spend it and moreover, they do not deserve it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88615384615 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61260666949 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581538461538 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2533183892 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.25 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0836756118928 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030168040763 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652250177615 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982260389898 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114263134657 0.056905535591 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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