Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
1. Being helpful
2. Being honest
3. Being well organized
In our modern world, there is no doubt that children imitate from adults. How adults treat towards children is important and controversial. There are some good values which we should share with the children. There are some moral values like: being helpful and honest and well organized etc. All of each are significant to share with the young children. However, one of them has the first priority to teach to a child. Different people have different opinions about which one is the most important to edify to a young child. In my opinion, being honest has the highest importance among the options in the statement above for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first and main reason which I want to mention is that honest persons are more reliable, and if a child learn to be honest, hence he will have a lot of friends in his future for his reliability. Honest persons are considered as good persons who are also very conscientious and dutiful. Honest persons note only are surrounded with a lot of friends who are also the same, but also have a great chance to improve in their life, because they are considered as reliable individuals. For instance, two years ago I was working in a big company. I was just an electrical engineer with some small responsibilities. One day, I had to stay in the company until night. When I finished my task, I found a briefcase which was full of money and gold. I gave it to my boss in the next morning. Due to my action he was so satisfied and relied on me. Because I was honest and reliable for him, he promoted me to be in charge of some cardinal projects. If I had not got that briefcase to my boss, he would not have considered me as an authentic person to rely on. So being honest is worthier than just being either a helpful or well organized person.
The second momentous reason which is also requisite to cite is that honest individuals have a high level of responsibility in the society. Our society benefits from engineers and doctors and professors and its other members who are loyal and do their tasks correctly. For their truthful characters, they always struggle to do their duties perfectly even they may face a lot of problems. For example, I have a friend. He is a civil engineer. Last year he was constructing a building for a woman. Although he faced lots of troubles and the building materials became more expensive suddenly, he did his obligation honestly. For his honesty, he felt obligated to do his job faultlessly even if a very low of profit was remained for him. And if he was a dishonest person, he must had used materials with a low quality for his interests without telling to the owner of building. So honest persons are responsible in the society.
To make the long story short, I highly recommend to spend more time for teaching young children how to be honest. Yes it is true, and no one cannot deny and cast a shadow of doubt on the significance of a fact which we must also spend time for teaching other good attributes to them like: being well organized and helpful etc. It is certainly worth dedicating more time on teaching honesty to our young sons and daughters, because they will have a better life style in the future. As I mentioned in the introduction the young children behave like their parents, and the parental role in the home is also very important.
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Essay evaluation report
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flaws:
No. of Words: 606 350 //it is too long. the introduction, two examples, and conclusion can be shorter. 350 words are enough.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 606 350
No. of Characters: 2709 1500
No. of Different Words: 279 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.962 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.47 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.55 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.766 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.264 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.411 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.191 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her a helpful or well organized person. The second momentous reason which is als...
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Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend spending'.
Suggestion: recommend spending
... To make the long story short, I highly recommend to spend more time for teaching young children h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, honestly, however, if, may, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, no doubt, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2778.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 606.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58415841584 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64176937284 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468646864686 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.0 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7830665957 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7058823529 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8235294118 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08823529412 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229429639455 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595186003078 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736758227151 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166186169035 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120260265916 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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